Talk:Stewart Friesen/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:51, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 07:51, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

References in the lead should be avoided per MOS:LEADCITE Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"driving the No. 52 Toyota Tundra for Halmar Friesen Racing." - consider using the {{abbr}} template on the text in bold to tell the reader that it is the car number Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"driving the No. 44 for HFR." - I believe it would help to clarify that the No. 44 is a vehicle for the uninitated Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Early years

"Friesen got hooked on racing early in life," - the text in bold is informal Done, changed "got hooked" to "started." NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"After racing go-karts," - this portion of text needs a citation verifying that its correct

I need help with this one, @Bcschneider53:. What citation can I find? NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Any more details on his achievements in go-karting?

I have no idea. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Sometimes, Friesen runs NASCAR and dirt on the same day." - On occassion, Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He maintains an active presence on New York dirt tracks like Fonda, Ransomville, Five Mile Point and Utica-Rome." - such as Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Gander RV & Outdoors Truck Series

Wikilink the term grid to the relevant article Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and Friesen's maiden voyage resulted in a 28th-place finish." - more formal; debut race Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Friesen recorded three top twenty finishes," - 20 Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Friesen announced that he would run the full 2017 season in the Halmar Friesen Racing" - the acryomns of Halmar Freisen Racing need to be in parentheses Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"following the first seven races of the season, HFR announced it would undergo a two-race hiatus before returning at Kentucky in July." - repetition of "race" Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink Kentucky to Kentucky Speedway Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"At Eldora, Friesen won the pole and stayed in the position for the start of the feature after winning his heat race." - qualified on the pole position and remained in the place Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He led over half the laps" - more than Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"No. 52 with Tommy Baldwin Jr. coming on as a team manager." - clarify that the No. 52 was a truck for the uninitated Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The third paragraph is uncited and needs to be verified by reliable source that explicitly mention the information contained within in

I need help with that, @Bcschneider53:. What is the best source for that? NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"After advancing to the playoffs and a best finish of 2nd 3 times throughout the year," - second on three occassions Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"he finished 7th in final points after being eliminated in the Round of 8." - seventh in the final points standings Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"At Kansas Speedway in spring," - avoid using seasons per MOS:SEASONS Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"but ran out of fuel with three laps to go due to a pit communication on the previous pit stop," - perhaps expand what happened exactly during the pit communication error @MWright96:, is the following quote good enough: "in which the fuelman did not put enough fuel in the truck"? NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"On August 1, 2019, Friesen finally broke through" - try rewording the text in bold to something more formal Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Friesen claimed his 2nd career victory and 1st at an oval track by winning at Phoenix after passing Brandon Jones with 4 laps to go." - achieved his second career victory and his first on an oval track by winning at Phoenix after passing Brandon Jones with four laps remaining. Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"As a result, Friesen made his first-ever Championship 4 appearance but ultimately finished 11th at Homestead and fourth in the final standings." - needs to be cited to a reliable source that explicitly mentions this statement

I need help with this one, @Bcschneider53:. What is the best source? NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Friesen made his first-ever Championship 4 appearance" - qualified for the Championship 4 for the first time Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"On the night of the Kansas truck race, Friesen finished second to Mat Williamson in a $53,000-to win race at Port Royal." - repetition of "race" Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Personal life

"He eventually attended" - think the word in bold isn't needed Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Briefly mention Zemeken's occupation for those who do not know what she does

I can't find a source on that. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"and dated driver Tony Stewart." - don't think we need the dating likes of one on this encyclopedia Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Friesen currently lives in Sprakers, New York." - avoid using the word in bold per MOS:CURRENTLY Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Motorsports career results: Gander RV & Outdoors Truck Series

It needs to be mentioned that the small number below the track name denotes the finishing position Freisen attained Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
All the columns in the results tables should include the scope="col" after the exclamation symbol per MOS:DTT Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The abbrevations No., pts and ref need the {{abbr}} template used on them to denote their meaning Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

References

Maintain a consistent format in how the dates are presented Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Multiple References are missing the authors and dates they were published

Ref 1 doesn't show a publication date. Same thing for Refs 2 and 3. Ref 2 is dead, so could you please archive the refs that are dead? Ref 6 has no publication date shown. Refs 10, 12, and 19 don't show publication dates. I did all of the refs which had publication dates in them. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 01:26, 1 December 2020 (UTC) Now I did all of the missing authors I can find. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 16:20, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The hyphens in the spaces of relevant references are better off replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
References 4, 6, 9 and 15 are dead and need archiving
Reference 7 is an unreliable YouTube which needs replacing with a reliable citation that explicitly mentions the information it cites Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 01:26, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 12 "TRUCKS: Friesen and Holman Start Big Wreck - Eldora 2016 | FOX Sports" avoid using all capital letter per MOS:ALLCAPS Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 13 "Stewart Friesen 2016 NASCAR Camping World Truck Series Results - Racing-Reference.info" is a duplicate of Reference 32 "Stewart Friesen – 2016 NASCAR Camping World Truck Series Results" Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 20 "Driver Stewart Friesen 2017 NASCAR Camping World Truck Series Results - Racing-Reference.info" is a duplicate of Reference 33 "Stewart Friesen – 2017 NASCAR Camping World Truck Series Results" Done NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 30 does not appear to be a reliable source

Removed. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:06, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@NASCARfan0548: I am trying to finish my last week of college online before I graduate, so my time is limited right now. Even so, Max, I encourage you to seek these sources out yourself. You nominated the article, so it's up to you to bring it to GA standards. Sometimes, that includes research for citations. Hope that helps, --Bcschneider53 (talk) 03:29, 28 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Bcschneider53, OK NASCARfan0548 ↗ 04:19, 28 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Bcschneider53, Thank you for fixing the URLs. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 20:44, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

After fixing most of these issues I can fix, is the article ready for GA yet, @MWright96:? NASCARfan0548 ↗ 16:20, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@NASCARfan0548: References 2, 4 and 13 have still not have had the archive links from the Internet Archive added to them by using the archiveurl= and archivedate= fields added to the references in question. MWright96 (talk) 20:15, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
MWright96, I want to archive them myself, but I don't have the permissions to run the bot. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 20:28, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @NASCARfan0548: Archiving can be done manually by first copy-pasting the urls at https://archive.org/ and then pasting the archived link from archive.org to the archiveurl= field in the relevant references on the Wikipedia article in question. MWright96 (talk) 20:39, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - @NASCARfan0548 and MWright96: I ran each of these three through the Internet Archive and was able to add the archived URLs. For future reference, Max, Micheal is right; this can be done without a bot simply by going to the Internet Archive in any web browser, pasting the URL you need, and finding the archived version. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 20:45, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - Bcschneider53, Thanks, I didn't know you can archive manually. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 20:52, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      Also Ref 2 gives a lot of CS1 errors, including a missing URL. NASCARfan0548 ↗ 20:53, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      My bad, must have forgotten to preview that one. Fixed the second ref. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 21:15, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      - Now promoting to GA class. I've archived one dead source that I missed MWright96 (talk) 21:29, 1 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]