Talk:Stanwood, Washington/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AmericanAir88 (talk · contribs) 15:26, 29 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Please Stand by. Review will commence soon. Ill notify of any changes if work comes in the way and I have to delay the review. For now, the review is on-time and will commence soon. AmericanAir88 (talk) 15:26, 29 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Wiki Check

No Copyvios found
No dead references found; Excellent job on referencing

Issues

@SounderBruce: Sorry for the delay!

"Its population was 6,231 at the 2010 census."

The sentence is very basic and could use some rewording and better vocabulary

This is a common sentence in city articles. I have shuffled it to flow better, but it's really a non-issue.

If you were to take this to FA, alts on the images would be needed, so its better to just add them now
- Not a GA requirement, so it's a non-issue.
Explain more on "bedroom community" in the lead.
- Added the inflows, but the link to the term is sufficient on its own.
The first paragraph of "history" is very choppy, consider rewording.
- Removed the chief and expanded the last sentence. I don't feel it's "very choppy" as you say.
"Stanwood suffered from a major fire on June 2, 1892, which destroyed the church and thirteen buildings, a total loss of $26,100; several businesses and the town's liquor supply were saved by volunteers from the town's Good Templars lodge.["

Very choppy, needs a rework.

Fixed the last part of the pre-semicolon statement, but I don't agree that it's "very choppy".

"a month after men"

Which men?

Added "town's", but it's rather self-explanatory.

"Stanwood's businesses relocated a block away from the riverfront in the 1920s and 1930s after the main flow of the Stillaguamish River shifted to another slough, rendering the wharf too shallow for steamboats and causing major floods and breaching of the dike system."

Please rework, it is run on and needs proper punctuation

Done.

" after a series of civic disputes"

What civic disputes?

It's not explained in the source.

"and groups cooperated on events and various initiatives."

What events and initiatives?

Not explained in the source.

Anything else new come after 2005?

Other than routine local affairs, nothing big has happened (except for the new high school, as explained in the Education section). This is a small town, after all.

I see a lot of the word "It" at the start of sentences, consider finding a better beginner for sentences.

Only two instances in the entire body is not "a lot".

"As of 2015," Got any recent economic studies?
- It's only two years out of date (as statistics are published the following year), so it's as recent as we can reasonably get. Some parts of the 2010 census are still being released, after all.
Elaborate more on the "arts and events". The second paragraph kind of reads like a brochure.

Describing what they have and including qualifies like "billed" in front of promotional statements is not brochure-like.

Anything else to add in "Health Care"?
- As explained in the section, there's no general hospital and thus very little to write about.

Issues revisited

@SounderBruce:

Can you include why the YMCA is notable. Your response below in the "Opinion" section should cover it.
- @AmericanAir88: Given that there's only 3,000 or so branches across the U.S. (about one for each county, or one for every six cities), that should cover it. But in hindsight, it's not really worth keeping unless I find something new. Sounder Bruce 03:37, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"Notable people" could stand to get better descriptions. For example: Zoe Marieh Urness can have "Photographer of Native American Heritage" instead of just "photographer".
- The section is meant for short descriptions, as the links should provide more information. See FAs like Arlington, Washington.
"The original plant was destroyed in an accidental fire on April 28, 1996"

Any effects happen as a result of the fire? What were the major impacts?

Moved up the unemployment to be more prominent.

Honestly, not much to really worry about in this article. Good job. AmericanAir88 (talk) 03:06, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Opinion

(Opinion) Why is the 2000 census needed and why is it after the 2010 census?
- For comparative purposes and to preserve old data. The newest data should, however, come first.
(Opinion) Why is it necessary to have two sentences on a YMCA? YMCA's are everywhere. Seems promotional to have it.
- It is the city's only endorsed indoor recreation facility, and is quite unusual for such a small town.

AmericanAir88 (talk) 02:20, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@AmericanAir88: Thanks for picking this up for review, but please try to thoroughly read through the GA guidelines and MOS before engaging in further reviews. "Very choppy" is a vague bit of feedback that doesn't help writers at all, and your other points seem to be filler material rather than useful feedback. Sounder Bruce 02:41, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@SounderBruce: Fair enough, ill rework my feedback. Thanks for the insight. AmericanAir88 (talk) 02:56, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Conclusion

@SounderBruce: Pass. Excellent work on the article. Sorry about the vague reviews, I have adjusted my wording to ensure future reviews go smoothly. Highly recommend FA. AmericanAir88 (talk) 13:21, 2 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]