Talk:Stanley Park, Blackpool
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[edit]I see I missed peer reviewing, but I will give a few comments here.
- "under the eye of Thomas Mawson." What does this mean? Why not designed by him?
- "dedicated to William Cocker" I would leave this out of the lead. It means nothing to the reader without the details below.
- "Within the Stanley Park grounds stands a 5000 seat cricket ground" "stands" is an odd word here - perhaps "are".
- "Albert Lindsay Parkinson". I would not put this in red - indicating that he is notable and should have his own article - without explanation.
- "The land previously consisted of "the most heterogeneous..." A quote should have the name of the author as "According to x..."
- "for the recreational needs of the modern generation". Comment as above.
- I find the paragraph on Stowe House confusing.
- "The lake’s tourist boating previously consisted of rowing boats and canoes though is now popular with motorboats and pedalos." This sounds ungrammatical.
- "which the council embraced" I would leave out "embraced".
- "Soon after, the building was deemed structurally unsafe". I would prefer "Soon afterwards"
- "animals to transverse between sites." I think "to be moved" would be better than traverse.
- I would have a bit more detail about access - say the names of three or four road names which have entrances.
- A good article. Dudley Miles (talk) 12:10, 4 January 2015 (UTC)