Talk:St John of God Berwick Hospital

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AnneGartner (talk · contribs) has been paid by St John of God Health Care on behalf of St John of God Health Care. Their editing has included contributions to this article. Disclosure by AnneGartner

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This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest was declined.
Update reference to St John of God Health Care to read: St John of God Health Care is one of the largest Catholic providers of health care services in Australia.^[1]
This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered.
Update reference tname of home nursing services to St John of God Healthcare at Home.^[2]

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--AnneGartner (talk) 08:40, 5 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi AnneGartner. Thank you for the suggestions, and thank you for using edit requests instead of editing the article directly. I am declining the first edit request for two reasons. First, the claim that your hospital network is the largest in Australia needs to supported by an independent source. I can't just take your organization's word for it. Second, labeling a hospital network the "largest" is vague and ambiguous. St John could be the largest by hospital beds, by expenditures, or by number of doctors; but the point is, Wikipedia articles should avoid using vaguely positive terms when more specific descriptions would do better.

For your second edit request, could you be more specific? Do you mean to say that "Health Choices" has been renamed "Healthcare at Home?" I have some qualms about featuring brand names in articles. Just calling it a home nursing service would be less promotional. I'll have to think about it, and other editors should feel free to step in on this one.

One more thing – could you clarify which organization is paying you for these edits? Is it St John of God Health Care or a third-party agency? I need this information so I can fill out the disclosure form for you. Best, Altamel (talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Talk page watchers, please see a relevant discussion at WP:COIN. Altamel (talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

As @Altamel: has said, could you be more specific about what you want to change? I am marking this as answered. @AnneGartner: Please remove the |answred=yes when you respond. Thanks Darth Flappy ^«Talk» 23:47, 24 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Altamel.Thanks for letting me know. Re Healthcare at Home - it is the name of the home nursing service. It would be accurate to just describe it as home nursing and remove any naming. I am employed directly by St John of God Health Care so there is no third party agency. Thanks. 58.109.203.115 (talk) 01:13, 25 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

[1] ttps://sjog.org.au. {{cite web}}: Missing or empty |title= (help)

[2] ttps://sjog.org.au/athome. {{cite web}}: Missing or empty |title= (help)

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