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Reviewer: Tbhotch (talk · contribs). Almost a year in the queue. 07:10, 7 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Thanks for starting a review on this article. I thought that the article would never get reviewed. Anyways, what are some things in the article that should be fixed? Statik N (talk) 19:15, 7 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

These:

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    B. MoS compliance:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
    See below
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
Resolved comments from Tbhotch
;Lead
  • "approached the record label's second-in-command, Jake Weiner." -> approached Jake Weiner, the record label's second-in-command.
  • "Weiner signed the band" -> 15 words ago you used "the band", use a synonym.
  • " in London, Ontario during the summer of 1999." -> same as above.
  • "Spit was moderately successful," -> Is no more?
  • The infobox mentions "Paperdoll" as a single, but there is no mention of it in the lead.
  • "The nu metal album has elements..." -> Spit is a nu metal album that has elements...
  • "mixed-to-positive" -> It received mixed or positive (or generally positive)?
  • You should mention Garth Richardson's production somewhere.
Background and recording
  • NG was acquired -> {{when}}
Music
  • "hip hop" -> "scream-rapped backup vocal" is not hip hop as rapping is a style and hip hop is a genre.
  • B-sides -> link it
  • "An AllMusic review" -> {{by whom}}
  • hatred, ignorance and sexism -> Except for hatred, it is almost a copy-paste from the source.
Lyrics
  • There are too many quotes here, reduce them.
Promotion, release, commercial performance and touring
  • I suggest spliting release and commercial performance and merge it with Critical reception (and create an independent subsection {or subsections} like Misterioso (Thelonious Monk album)#Release and reception). Leaving it as Promotion and touring.
  • (RIAA)[3] on -> (RIAA),[3] on
  • File:Kittie Charlotte music video.jpg fails WP:NFCC#8 as there is no critical analysis of the image, or the music video. Although you "cannot show a picture of a music video through only words", you can describe it. In this still, there is no educational value that is lost. Also fails WP:NFCC#1 (marked as n.a), as free pictures of Atfield might exist that can replace the image.
  • File:Kittie Dynamo 2000.jpg fails the same criteria.
  • "Spit peaked at number 79" -> {{when}}
Critical reception
  • "mixed-to-positive" -> Same as lead, they are mixed or positive (or generally positive).
  • Same as Lyrics, reduce the quotefarm.
References
  • 2: Author missing (full name is John Huff)
  • 6: Access date is missing.
  • 11: Issue, volume and/or page are missing.
  • 12: Volume and issue are missing.
  • 13: Authors missing; 11 February 2015. Retrieved 29 April 2015. (invert them for consistency)
  • 14: "MUST HEAR" -> "Must Hear" (WP:ALLCAPS)
  • 16: Author and date are missing.
  • 18: Author is missing.
  • 20: Author and location are missing.
  • 21: Issue and volume are missing.
  • 28: Access date is missing.
  • 29: Access date is missing.
  • 32: WP:ALLCAPS.
  • 34: "Metal Edge, June 2001" is not enough.
  • 41: Access date is missing.
  • 49: Access date is missing.
External links

These are the main issues that I found. Article on hold. © Tbhotch (en-2.5). 23:09, 7 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Citation 21 doesn't need an issue or volume because it doesn't have those. It's a book. Some of the citations that don't have an issue or volume or page doesn't have issues, volumes, or pages because I couldn't find them. Citation 32's last name is actually spelled as "vanHorn". As for the obscenity controversies in music category, there's the quote in the body: "Spit was controversial because of its song titles, which made many people think that the album's songs are about sex". Statik N (talk) 00:56, 9 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Statik N: For Citation 32 I was referring to a title, not to vanHorn. I was about to approve the GAN, nevertheless, this suddenly happened. I cannot approve an article with an edit-war and the release dates are unsourced (except for "Paperdoll" that is supported by source 40). Resolve the conflict, and ping me when it's done. © Tbhotch (en-2.5). 01:49, 9 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
By the way, Backrish and Charlotte charted on the UK Top 100. This can be mentioned. © Tbhotch (en-2.5). 01:57, 9 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
All single dates are now sourced. I sourced "Charlotte" in the body. Statik N (talk) 02:33, 9 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
OK then. Article approved. Good work. © Tbhotch (en-2.5). 04:06, 9 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]