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Reviewer: Newtothisedit (talk · contribs) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this --Newtothisedit (talk) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  1. Is it well written
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
    B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
    C. It contains no original research:
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
  5. Is it stable
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

Comments

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  • For the caption of one image it says "SooperDooperLooper's train" and the other it says "SooperDooperLooper's train" I would change this so they have the same wording
  • Add the year when a date is within a new month Ex: "Work began on the project site on October 29" to "Work began on the project site on October 29 1976"
  • "The roller coaster's iconic vertical loop was finished" This use of iconic could be seen as peacock language. I would change this sentence to "The roller coaster's vertical loop was finished"
  • "A 150-foot (46-meter) tunnel was added to part of the roller coaster for the 1979 season which would feature lights and sounds" change to "A 150-foot (46-meter) tunnel featuring lights and sounds was added to the roller coaster for the 1979 season."
  • "The roller coaster necessitated around 500 tons" to "The roller coaster needed around 500 tons"

That's all I have--Newtothisedit (talk) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Newtothisedit: Appreciate another review; all suggestions have been fulfilled from above. Let me know if there's anything else you spot! :D Adog (TalkCont) 03:45, 10 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good, passing it. Newtothisedit (talk) 03:49, 10 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]