Talk:Sometime Samurai/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:29, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I will go through this completely today! --K. Peake 07:29, 28 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good!
"for Tei's studio album" → "for Tei's fifth studio album,"
"It was originally recorded as" → "The song was originally recorded as"
"The track remained unfinished for" → "It remained unfinished for"
For consistency, only use the song instead of the track
"In "Sometime Samurai", a" → "In it, a"
Mention the ceremony separately from the MTV Award's name and wikilink it too
"Tei played "Sometime Samurai" during" → "Tei played the song during"

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 01:56, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Background and recording

First para looks good!
"Despite the smooth collaboration" should either use the plural collaborations or collaboration process
"Scotland, and the UK." → "Scotland and the UK." unless the comma is a rule in Japanese
The word either is not used by the source
"for three hours." → "for around three hours."

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 01:56, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Production and composition

Img looks good!
""Sometime Samurai" is a" → "Musically, "Sometime Samurai" is a" but where are these genres sourced?

Tei said the song is rock to him and Grunebaum noted its house beat. Damian Vo (talk) 15:48, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Pipe Japanese Curry to Japanese curry
"Wave era," highlighting its" → "Wave era", highlighting its" per MOS:QUOTE
Lowercase the Knacks per MOS:THEMUSIC
"mark the first inclusion" → "marked the first inclusion"
"of "Sometime Samurai," Tei" → "of "Sometime Samurai", Tei"
"with the line" → "with the lyrics,"
"drew a comparison" shouldn't this info all be present tense per it being a book?
"Baker further suggested that" → "He further suggested that"

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 01:56, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

"In November, remixes of" → "In November 2005, remixes of"
No reviews to be added?

Those two reviews are the only sources I could find since SM is only a promo single in Japan, and Tei did not release Flash in the US. Damian Vo (talk) 15:18, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Img looks good!
Shouldn't the author review use present tense?
"from February to May." → "from February to May 2005." per this being a new para
Rest soon; sorry I don't have the time to finish today.

Thank you so much for reviewing this. I addressed the issues you mentioned above. There is no rush on this, so please take your time :D Damian Vo (talk) 15:34, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

That is fine, I am glad you understood me moving the remainder of this review to today! --K. Peake 18:24, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink music video
Baring in mind WP:TVPLOT, could you not add more info that you know about the video?

Sadly the only "legit" reference about the video I could find is Andrew's, which is 2 sentences long. Damian Vo (talk) 01:45, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Minogue did not appear" → "Minogue does not appear"
Again, should comma be used before "and" in Japanese?
"of "GBI (German Bold Italic)," and" → "of "GBI (German Bold Italic)", and" plus mention it was staff for those reviews
The source does not mention The O2 Arena

The O2 Arena is mentioned on the front cover artwork of the DVD, hence the media note. Damian Vo (talk) 01:45, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Formats and track listings

Good

Credits and personnel

Good

Notes

views the lyrics → views the line
"depicts her lover as "an urban Buddhist punk."" → "depicting her lover as "an urban Buddhist punk"." per MOS:QUOTE

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 01:56, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

References

Copyvio score checks out at 27.5%!!

Websites

Cite news.com.au as publisher instead
Pipe Warner Music Japan to Warner Music Group
Pipe Tower Records Japan to Tower Records
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with "Guest: TOWA TEI"

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 01:56, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Print sources

Good

Media notes

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this is now done on time! --K. Peake 18:24, 29 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed all your comments. Thanks again for reviewing yet another one of my articles! Damian Vo (talk) 01:56, 30 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

✓ Pass now, there was one ref misformatted that I forgot but I fixed the capitals issue now! --K. Peake 18:55, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much! Good luck with the Backlog Drive this month! Damian Vo (talk) 02:41, 1 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]