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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 15:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article. This is my first bio GAN I review, and I would love to learn many things from this decision. Gerald WL 15:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Keep either "Indonesian" or "Javanese." "Javanese" already covers Indonesia as a whole. In addition, recommend linking. Gerald WL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Link regent. Gerald WL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Link Trenggalek. Gerald WL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Link Irian Jaya. Gerald WL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Per tag, I suggest expanding the lead. Gerald WL 14:05, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done and lead expanded. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Military career

Paragraphs 1, 2, and 3 used two citations, placed them at the same place. Mind relocating to the claim(s) it supports? Gerald WL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done except for the 3rd paragraph; citation 1 and 2 is reinforcing each other regarding the dates and fact. --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"After the war"-- what war? Gerald WL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Trenggalek to Trenggalih

The subsection name is not so clear. Suggest renaming to "Renaming Trenggalek" Gerald WL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

There's no word on the aftermath: is it renamed or not. Suggest adding that up, if there is one. Gerald WL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Parasamya Purnakarya Nugraha

First two sentence supported by two citations. Suggest relocate. Gerald WL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Legacy

"the Soetran award"-- suggest capitalizing to "the Soetran Award." Gerald WL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Three redlinks. Either interwiki link, create stub (if person warrants a WP article), or remove redlinks. Gerald WL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done Removed redlinks. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 00:48, 15 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Governor of Irian Jaya

Link Irian Jaya. Gerald WL 14:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Acub Zainal is redlinked. Suggest removing. Gerald WL 14:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done except point 1, as it is already linked in the lead. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Irian Jaya earthquake

"As a result, 12 large villages in the X Valley were swallowed by the Earth." What is "X Valley" and suggest rewording the metaphoric "swallowed by the Earth." Gerald WL 09:10, 18 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done Ah, my apologies. The X Valley was without name prior to the 2000s; it is now known as the Baliem Valley. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 12:35, 18 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Jeromi Mikhael, last thing: in paragraph 3, ref 31 and 27 is used at the same time. Similar case at "Death", last sentence. Mind relocating or removing one of them, if appropriate? Gerald WL 12:53, 18 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:01, 18 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Jeromi Mikhael, in my opinon this has passed the GA criteria. Congrats! Gerald WL 13:03, 18 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Gerald Waldo Luis, I've done what you requested. Please check. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Jeromi Mikhael, see "Irian Jaya earthquake" above. After that is resolved, I'll do a linking copyedit, and that should make it for a good article. Apologies for the wait. Gerald WL 09:11, 18 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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