Talk:Snuppy/GA1
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OK, I was attracted to the weird article name. Now let's get to work. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:15, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
I know the article is short, but the lead is a little short - but see if you can add some more material first.
In addition, there are extra complexities involved, with removing the eggs from canine ovaries, which do not occur in animals such pigs and sheep, the eggs were thus removed from the oviduct (as opposed to the ovaries). - cumbersome sentence, you need to split this.
Only three of the surrogate mothers became pregnant, and of those three, only two gave birth and of those two only one of the puppies survived. (can remove bolded bits, as no meaning is lost)Or better, Only three of the surrogate mothers became pregnant, only two gave birth, and only one of the puppies survived. Looie496 (talk) 00:49, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
Snuppy was named as Time Magazine's "Most Amazing Invention" of the year in 2005, with particular recognition to the cloning technique used in the process, which Time stated were "embodied by a history-making puppy" and despite numerous labs performing mammalian cloning, they cited that Hwang's team was, like Snuppy, "extraordinary"- again, split long sentence
Between late 2005-2006 Hwang came under fire for a series of misconducts, first related to his work prior to Snuppy; the claim that he had successfully cloned a human embryo. - part after semicolon is not a sentence (and needs to be), and first part needs rewording too.
serious breaches of the code of ethics. - ditto - could have a mdash then this clause, or make it a sentence after a semicolon
Is there any more detail which can be added to Controversy section? This is potentially fascinating but somewhat brief here, and it is unclear when it says the only thing true is that the dog was a clone - then what about the 123 pregancies etc. were they not known and then known, was that part of the story changed?
Ditto Progeny - actually, this could be relabelled subsequent delvelopments or somesuch, as one needs to add whether the dog is still healthy (didn't dolly get sick or old prematurely?)
Given the brevity of the article, some context might be good, eg similarities between this process and dolly the sheep, or cats that were cloned. actually there is enough.
Fascinating read overall though. I will keep my fingers crossed. Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:29, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
In this sentence "Replacement team leader and veterinarian Yi Byeong-cheon used this technology to clone the first sterilized working dogs, Toppy.", please correct the name to Lee Byeong-Chun, not Yi Byeong-cheon.He is the first author of the article about "Birth of Snuppy" in Nature (Dogs cloned from adult somatic cells, Nature 2005) and principal researcher of the dog cloning project. Now Dr. Lee's research team keep Snuppy in Seoul National University. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 147.46.62.233 (talk) 01:27, 6 May 2013 (UTC)