Talk:Sleep hygiene/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Melody Lavender (talk · contribs) 17:43, 8 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I will be reviewing this article. First, it is still very much a how-to article. This could be solved by writing the text more like you are writing about scientific findings from therapist to therapist, not so much an advice article for patients. The heading could be changed from 'recommendations' to something like 'aspects of sleep hygiene'. Also the bullet point format is not the usual style format for Wikipedia articles. It should be in paragraphs. I also noted that an excessive amount (about half) of the references is to a single source.--^Melody _Lavender 17:43, 8 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Melody, Thanks so much for taking this on! I liked your suggested new header, and I will work today on re-formatting the recommendations in a new way other than bullets. As for the most frequent reference I use, I'm a little torn. I have had a few classmates that were told by their reviewers that they should not cite as many original journal articles, and that review articles are preferred. The Hauri chapter that I cite the most was a review of many sleep hygiene studies and findings, so it seemed like a perfect source. I can add original journal article citations more throughout the page though, in addition to the Hauri chapter. Please let me know if this would be preferred. -- Leslierrn (talk) 15:45, 9 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The assessment section, by the way, can stay in bullet point form. The sources should ideally all be secondary, the guidelines for this are at WP:MEDRS. One possibility to find such sources is typing in "Sleep hygiene" review. You'll usually get some results that live up to MedRS. I just found these sources, for example, on google scholar:

Benca, Ruth M. Diagnosis and Treatment of Chronic Insomnia: A Review In: Psychiatric Services Volume 56 Issue 3, March 2005, pp. 332-343.
Lewandowski, Amy S., Marisol Toliver-Sokol, and Tonya M. Palermo. Evidence-Based Review of Subjective Pediatric Sleep Measures In: Journal of Pediatric Psychology Volume 36, Issue 7, pp. 780-793.

These are just two papers I picked because the full text is available online, which is very useful to our readers. There are several others, they don't all have to have the full text online, of course. I'm afraid medical editors here at Wikipedia are particularly picky about sources.--^Melody _Lavender 17:51, 9 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Melody, I have updated the formatting of the recommendations section - it is now more appropriately avoiding a "how-to" presentation. I will continue the last of my edits through tomorrow, adding in some supplemental citations per your advice. Thank you for your feedback and advice on this! -- Leslierrn (talk) 5:05, 11 December 2014 (UTC)

Hi again, I have identified a number of other review articles related to the various topics, and have accordingly replaced repetitive citations with these. I am happy to do more still to make this article better quality for our wikipedia readers. Thank you again for volunteering your time to review this sleep hygiene article!-- Leslierrn (talk) 19:50, 11 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Leslierrn! All 6 Good Article criteria are met and I will pass the article. Thank you for your great work!--^Melody _Lavender 20:13, 12 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Well-written Done
Verifiable Done
Broad in its coverage Done
Neutral Done
Stable Done
Illustrated - criterion doesn't apply.

Hi Melody, This is fantastic news! Thank you so much for taking the time to provide feedback and review the article - it was truly a collaborate effort. I'm glad wikipedia readers will now be able to learn about sleep hygiene in a informed and balanced way. Thank you! -- Leslierrn (talk) 22:05, 12 December 2014 (UTC — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.170.129.6 (talk)