Talk:Sisak concentration camp/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Amanuensis Balkanicus (talk · contribs) 15:16, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 01:23, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

C. It contains no original research:

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Comments

...many Croats came to resent Serb political hegemony...which resulted in the passing of legislation that favoured Serb political, religious and business interests. Could you quote the text verifying the statement?
..., but were granted protection by Mussolini and thus evaded capture I would form this fragment into a new sentence.
...as its neighbours aligned themselves with the Axis powers All of them?
At the outbreak of World War II... When?
A link to Royal Yugoslav Government?
They placed his teenage nephew Peter on the throne... The underage Peter was already sitting on the throne.
Links to Yugoslav government-in-exile, diplomatic recognition, concentration camp, Concentration camps in the Independent State of Croatia?
Introduce Zagreb as the capital of NDH.
...the town hosted two sub-camps... Which? (Sisak or Zagreb?)
A link to Reich?
...the abandoned Teslić factory... A link? Alternatively, rephrase it. (Perhaps, "an abandoned .... factory")
...the Kozara Offensive... Against whom and where?
Introduce Novi Sisak.
Explain Sicherheitsdienst.
...authored a report in which he reported... Rephrase.
A link to "communist resistance"?
...the homes of local aristocrats... Could you name some of them? A link to Croatian nobility?
Introduce the Department for People's Protection.
Records kept by Budisavljević containing information about each child detained at Sisak were confiscated by the Department for People's Protection (Serbo-Croatian: Odeljenje za zaštitu naroda; OZNA) and kept from public view... Why?
...protesting the canonization... The canonization or the language used during the canonization?

Image review

File:Independent State Of Croatia 1941 Locator Map.png: some words on the internal borders in caption?
File:Map of the Axis occupation of Yugoslavia.svg: add at least one reliable source to verify the map to the file in Commons.

Source review

Fix references 30 and 34. Borsoka (talk) 02:18, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Additional comment by Tomobe03

Reference 1 (Mojzes, p. 158) does not support the prose it is used to reference. The material on the indicated page does not deal with 1941, but with 1990 - presumably the result of a typo in the page number. However, the source appears to be of poor quality. Specifically, as I was looking at p.158, I noticed it explicitly states kuna currency was introduced on July 25, 1990. This did not happen until May 1994.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:44, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Query @Amanuensis Balkanicus: when do you think you can address all issues? I put the review "on hold" for a week. Borsoka (talk) 02:13, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]