Talk:Sibyl Hathaway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Rosiestep (talk · contribs) 20:27, 1 March 2014 (UTC)

I'll review this one within the week. --Rosiestep (talk) 20:27, 1 March 2014 (UTC)

OK, thanks Rosiestep. Best, Matty.007 20:32, 1 March 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• "...but she kept the governmental reins in her hands" - clunky
  • Done. Matty.007
• Add maiden name per WP:FULLNAME
  • Done. Matty.007

Early life

• "She was born..." - I assume this refers to Sibyl but, grammatically, it refers to Sophie.
  • Done. Matty.007
• Please sort out William Frederick Collings vs. William Frederick vs. Frederick vs. Collings.
  • Done. I used Collings, as that is given as her maiden name in a source. Matty.007
• "the local Sercquiais dialect of Norman language" - the local Sercquiais dialect of the Norman language
  • Done. Matty.007

First marriage

• "When the Seigneur stormed aboard looking for her the captain hid her, she travelled to the house of a relative in London." clunky
  • Done. Matty.007

Infobox

• fine as is

Accession and remarriage

• "Towards the end of his life, he stopped requesting the inhabitants to pay tithes..." - Towards the end of his life, he stopped requesting from the inhabitants the payment of tithes...
  • Done. Matty.007
• "She used the island's peculiarity" - can you clarify how it was peculiar?
  • Done. Matty.007
• "but the Chief Pleas refused to pass an ordinance that would forbid selling alcohol to anyone known to get too drunk." - drunk vs. too drunk?
  • Done. Matty.007

Second World War

• Fine as is, though I'm not convinced that the PROCLAMATION is necessary

Postwar years

• "Once again widowed, Hathaway resumed complete authority over the island. In 1957, Queen Elizabeth II and the Duke of Edinburgh returned to Sark in what was the first time a reigning monarch had ever come to the island" - clunky
  • Done. Matty.007
• "On the 400th anniversary of Queen Elizabeth I's grant of charter to Sark's first seigneur" - what year was this?
  • Done. Matty.007

Death

• fine

References

• Ref4 - What does the "P." stand for in Guernsey P.?
  • I would have said Guernsey Press. Matty.007
• Ref6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14 - None of these have an online presence?
  • 6 and 12 done, 7 nothing but Amazon, 8 nothing but Amazon and GBooks, 9 nothing (from now onwards nothing excludes Amazon, GBooks and Goodreads), nothing for any others

EL

• fine

Images

• All are Commons

Category

• Place of birth missing - Isn't Guernsey sufficient?
  • Done, Matty.007

I'm done with the review. Please ping me when you think you've finished. --Rosiestep (talk) 04:56, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, I have tried to fix all issues. Thanks, Matty.007 18:57, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Good job. Looks adequate for GA. --Rosiestep (talk) 03:30, 6 March 2014 (UTC)

I am a bit ashamed to see that Matty had to address all the issues by himself. My editing pattern has been a little, well, erratic these days. Thank you both! Surtsicna (talk) 16:13, 6 March 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review Rosiestep; Surtsicna, you wrote the article in the first place, well done! Thanks, Matty.007 17:54, 6 March 2014 (UTC)