Talk:Si Yi Chen/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 10:55, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Citation needed tags must be fulfilled;
Refs 15 and 18 have dead links and should be updated or replaced.
If "Criticism of Australian Federal Police tipoff" is indeed relevant to Si Yi Chen - who is not mentioned - this needs to be made clearer or the section removed if not; the same goes for the "additional arrests" section.
The English should be tightened - the use of so many quotations gives the article a journalistic rather than encyclopedic tone. There are also some small mistakes - "abroad; saying" is not correct grammar, for example.
The lead should be longer - it needs to provide an adequate summary per WP:LEAD)
The article ought to say more about the man personally - but this sort of thoroughness is not required under the GACR
I'm also worried about some bias against the Indonesian authorities. Much is made of his appeals, and that of the Australian government. There is little from Indonesia in this regard. A few tweaks, such as a corresponding quotation or the Indonesian side of the story from a native newspaper would be sufficient.

Placing on hold for 7 days so these problems can be fixed. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:55, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Failing per 7 day wait and comments made at the nominator's talk page which amount to a withdrawal. Once the issues have been fixed, feel free to nominate the article again - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 14:34, 13 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]