Talk:Shrewsbury/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Phlsph7 (talk · contribs) 10:00, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Unfortunately, this is a quickfail, due to QF criteria 1 & 3, see WP:QF. The article has many unreferenced passages and several full paragraphs lack references. To fix this, make sure that the claims in the body of the article are supported by inline citations no later than the end of the paragraph.

There are also various maintenance tags: 4x citation needed, 1x page needed, 3x better source needed, 1x permanent dead link, 1x bare URL PDF, 1x dead link. One of the tags "better source needed" is a wordpress blog, which is considered unreliable. A few other sources also seem to be blogs and would have to be checked for reliability. Despite all the improvements since the last GAR a few months ago, there is still a lot of work to be done.

A few other observations

• WP:EARWIG detects one WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE:
  • our article: The following year, after his return to London, Caius published A Boke or Counseill Against the Disease Commonly Called the Sweate, or Sweatyng Sicknesse (1552). The president of the council was the dedicatee of the book, and the dedicatory epistle explains his appointment. This text became the main source of knowledge of this disease, now understood to be influenza.
  • https://www.britannica.com/biography/John-Caius: The following year, after his return to London, he published A Boke or Counseill Against the Disease Commonly Called the Sweate, or Sweatyng Sicknesse (1552), which became the main source of knowledge of this disease.
• The town has Saxon roots and surviving institutions whose foundations date from that time, represent a cultural continuity possibly going back as far as the 8th century. replace "time, represent" with "time and represent"
• Henry subsequently took the government of the town in to his own hands replace "in to" with "into"
• In 1821, the county purchased a building in College Hill which was adapted to became the judge's lodgings, replace "became" with "become"
• The town council, first convened on 1 April 2009, and its chair is the mayor of Shrewsbury. remove the two commas
• several mentions of "north east", "south east", and the like: add a hyphen
• several mentions of "14th century", "19th century", and the like: add a hyphen if this is used as an adjective, as in "The King's Head in Mardol contains a 14th-century wall painting,"
• some passages use Oxford commas but others don't. Consistency would be better.
• avoid American English (travellers)

Phlsph7 (talk) 10:00, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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