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Did you know nomination
[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by BorgQueen (talk) 17:50, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- ... that "Sheesh!" was produced in a rented Malibu, California, in-home studio? Source: https://www.beyondthestagemagazine.com/surfaces-interview-september-2021/
- ALT1: ... that "Sheesh!" was streamed 4 million times in the first 11 days after its first live peformances? Source: https://www.beyondthestagemagazine.com/surfaces-interview-september-2021/
- ALT2: ... that "Sheesh!" has been used in ad campaigns by both Toyota and Pizza Hut? Source: https://www.ispot.tv/ad/qcv6/toyota-corolla-cross-perfect-getaway-song-by-surfaces-and-tai-verdes-t1 and https://www.ispot.tv/ad/2BRP/pizza-hut-melts-world-of-me
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Museo Cabeza de Juárez (2nd credit)
Created by TonyTheTiger (talk). Self-nominated at 08:54, 9 November 2022 (UTC).
- per DYK procedure, an article at AfD is placed on hold until the AfD is resolved. Should the article survive, it will again become eligible for review. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 20:41, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
- Article was kept.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 09:46, 14 November 2022 (UTC)
- Article is new enough and long enough. Gave it a heavy copy edit. The "Use in television" (renamed from "Pop culture") section needs attention, as one of those sources there is a YouTube link, and another does not explicitly say that the song appears in the commercial. Generally if a secondary source can not be used to establish a use of the song in a particular commercial/clip/episode/etc. it's not worth mentioning. DigitalIceAge (talk) 02:38, 23 November 2022 (UTC)
- User:DigitalIceAge Are you talking about this source where Sheesh! is not mentioned in the prose, but that has the commercial with the audio of the song.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:37, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
- @DigitalIceAge:, is the phrase "viral platform on the platform" correct?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:46, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
- @DigitalIceAge:, doesn't the middle source in the Pizza Hut paragraph properly cite the song.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:51, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
- @TonyTheTiger: viral platform on the platform Whoops, fixed. Fair enough; I have adjusted the section to my liking. I felt it was worded a bit oddly and getting too overly detailed, so I pared it down e.g. to only include months instead of exact dates and general platforms for airings of ads instead of listing every site that they appear on. Article should now be good to go. DigitalIceAge (talk) 05:00, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
- Comment: I removed most of the advertising section; ispot.tv, thedrum.com, and Looper aren't reliable enough sources for me to feel comfortable calling an advertisement's usage of a song encyclopedic information. This shouldn't affect the status of this nomination, unless the prose is restored. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 09:32, 26 November 2022 (UTC)
- The article was promoted, after which the removed content was restored – while the discussion is ongoing, I've temporarily pulled the hook from prep. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:38, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- @TonyTheTiger: viral platform on the platform Whoops, fixed. Fair enough; I have adjusted the section to my liking. I felt it was worded a bit oddly and getting too overly detailed, so I pared it down e.g. to only include months instead of exact dates and general platforms for airings of ads instead of listing every site that they appear on. Article should now be good to go. DigitalIceAge (talk) 05:00, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
The article seems to have returned to stability. Over 44 hours without issues from user:theleekycauldron-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 18:10, 1 December 2022 (UTC)
- Just to clarify, I still have objections that haven't been addressed; I just haven't continued to respond, as other things have been taking up my time recently. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:28, 3 December 2022 (UTC)
- User:BlueMoonset hit my User talk. I am not sure what issues for this nomination need to be addressed. There has been no commentary here or at Talk:Sheesh! in weeks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 12:55, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- We did get the attention of a very thorough WP:GAC reviewer. The article is under revision in this regard.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:31, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
Reviewing... Flibirigit (talk) 22:13, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
General: Article is new enough and long enough |
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Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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Overall: Article was created on November 6, and nominated within seven days. Length is adequate. Article meets basic sourcing requirements. The article is neutral in tone. No plagiarism issues were detected. All three hooks are interesting, properly mentioned and cited inline, and verified by the sources. No images are used on this nomination, and the album cover has a proper fair use rationale. QPQ requirement is complete. Flibirigit (talk) 22:32, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- Pulled the hook as the previous concerns haven't been addressed. BorgQueen (talk) 06:43, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- Marking with non-tick icon so the hook won't be moved to the Approved page prematurely. BlueMoonset (talk) 06:49, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- All right – I'm not going to continue engaging with this nomination, but I've been asked to clarify where this article needs to be improved. After that, I'm outta here :)
- Ispot.tv is not a reliable enough source to justify the inclusion of the information it currently supports.
- In "Use in television", paragraph 1, sentences 1–2 read like puffery and should be trimmed back. Why is it necessary to say which company produced the ad, the exact date it debuted, or what the exact title of the ad was?
- In "Use in television", paragraph 2 reads like puffery and should be trimmed back. Why is it necessary to say how many ads this company produced, their lengths and titles, and their exact debut date, as well as the commercials' actors, target platforms, and corporate backers? This article is an encyclopedic entry about a song, not a platform for elevating whichever company pays for the song's licensing.
- In "Use in television", paragraph 3, sentence 2 has a primary non-independent source, which does not justify inclusion.
- Do what you will with all that – I don't plan on being back at this nom to argue whether these points are valid, nor to certify that they've been rectified. Cheers :) theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 09:32, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- This article has now twice passed independent DYK reviews and has passed a GAC review. I will come by to take a look at the pronounced drive-by issues claimed to be outstanding. I can say that three people have supported the article and we only have a drive-by objection.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:38, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- To clarify:
- This article was passed at DYK in this discussion above by User:DigitalIceAge 05:00, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
- This article was passed at DYK in this discussion above by User talk:Flibirigit 22:32, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- This article was passed at Talk:Sheesh!/GA1 by User:Kyle Peake 15:02, January 7, 2023 (UTC)
- user:theleekycauldron at DYK in this discussion above declared a drive-by objection 09:32, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- -TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:44, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- WP:DRIVEBY seems to be a term for objecting without sufficient explanation. In the past it has been used for objections without willingness to engage in discussion, but that is not the official use of the term. I mean objecting without any willingness to discuss. Whatever that is is what I am pointing out.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:49, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- Ispot.tv is not listed at WP:RSPSOURCES, hence I feel it sufficient and reliable. I found no such "primary non-independent source" as noted in the complaint. Discussing the name of the advertisement is relevant to understanding how the song was used. Three different users have read through the "Use in television" section and none found concerns of puffery. WP:puffery defines it as " praise-filled adjectives and claims". I found no such adjectives or claims. A few words could be trimmed, but mentioning the length of an advertisement is not puffery, it's just wordiness. I stand by my review that the article meets all DYK criteria. Flibirigit (talk) 14:33, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- Sounds reasonable. If there's no further objection I'm going to re-tick it. BorgQueen (talk) 17:12, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- Note the ongoing AfD for this article. I would assume a non-notable subject would be ineligible for DYK, and that's how that AfD is leaning so far. QuietHere (talk) 12:50, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
Commercial use
[edit]User:Theleekycauldron, Given the list of leading companies that apparently rely on iSpot.TV per this and this, iSpot is reliable for the content that is at issue. TheDrum.com seems to be a form of media with an editorial masthead (I have never seen anything with that many listed editors contested as an RS). MSN.com should be a reliable enough source to confirm that the song was in the add.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:28, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- @TonyTheTiger: A list of "partners" doesn't establish to what extent, if at all, those companies care about the data iSpot produces. It does establish that iSpot has a vested financial interest in covering the advertisements of various companies (primarily by selling analytics data), which makes me even less inclined to support the notion that we should be treating it like a neutral RS. In other words, a source that has a vested financial interest in covering a topic can't establish whether or not that topic is important.
- The MSN.com article you've linked is actually a Looper article that MSN has reprinted – Looper is marginally reliable at best.
- Simply having a masthead isn't the only measure of reliability – The Drum looks to me to be primarily a marketing platform where you can pay to boost your content. At best, it's an advertising trade publication, so I guess I could see the content staying in with that. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 19:48, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- You seem to conceed theDrum.com. As for iSpot.TV, WP:TV & WP:FILM articles always cite Nielsen Ratings which sells analytics, WP:NSONGS and WP:NALBUMS use as a criteria of notability whether works have been certified, which is a form of analytics as are media sources that produce charting information, which is a form of analytics. What are you talking about?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:17, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Even if you sidestep the fact that Nielsen ratings are basically recognized as not just king analyst, but kingmaker in television analytics, there's a difference between the way Nielsen ratings are used in articles versus what's happening here: Nielsen ratings are generally best used to supplement content about the article subject, not third parties that interact with the article subject. For example, it might be used in an article about a TV episode to say how well-watched it was; that's okay, if not ideal. If you were using analytics to say that the song got, say, a hundred thousand streams on Spotify, that might be fine (depending on where you got that number from). But what iSpot is doing here isn't that; it's emphasizing the importance of a third party's usage of the song in an ad, and there's just nothing in the source or the source's reputation to suggest that that's a link the article needs to be making. It comes off as pretty promotional to use a primary and likely non-independent source to highlight the advertisements of specific companies. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:31, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- If I was trying to make this a WP:FAC, I think that might be a valid concern. You are objecting at the stage where we art trying to encourage editors to take an article beyond the stub stage to 1500 characters.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:48, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- DYK articles have to conform to WP:V, same as FA articles – I'd wager that at least 4,000 viewers are going to read this article when its DYK date comes along. That means that it's important for us to make sure the article meets some minimum standards. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:50, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- If I was trying to make this a WP:FAC, I think that might be a valid concern. You are objecting at the stage where we art trying to encourage editors to take an article beyond the stub stage to 1500 characters.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:48, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Oh, and the D'Amelio show ref is just to the show itself; I'm not sure that's a good enough source, either. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:34, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- The time in the episode is just a statement that a popular show used the song. It is not a statement about notability of the appearance. This is just a section showing that the song had lots of commercial use and trying to give the reader a way to understand how the song is being used commercially.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:46, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Do you have any secondary sources showing the song's noted use in the commercial sphere?
- theDrum.com-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:57, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Well, that's a primary independent source, but okay, that'll give you most of the Pizza Hut commercial. What about the Toyota commercial and the D'Amelio show? theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 22:02, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- People use to wildly input commercial uses as unsourced lists. I have enabled the reader to WP:V this commercial use in the D'Amelio show, by properly sourcing the primary. The notability of its use in the show is its use in the show by pop culture tastemakers/trendsetters, which is itself self evident.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:44, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Do you have any secondary sources showing the song's noted use in the commercial sphere?
- The time in the episode is just a statement that a popular show used the song. It is not a statement about notability of the appearance. This is just a section showing that the song had lots of commercial use and trying to give the reader a way to understand how the song is being used commercially.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:46, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Even if you sidestep the fact that Nielsen ratings are basically recognized as not just king analyst, but kingmaker in television analytics, there's a difference between the way Nielsen ratings are used in articles versus what's happening here: Nielsen ratings are generally best used to supplement content about the article subject, not third parties that interact with the article subject. For example, it might be used in an article about a TV episode to say how well-watched it was; that's okay, if not ideal. If you were using analytics to say that the song got, say, a hundred thousand streams on Spotify, that might be fine (depending on where you got that number from). But what iSpot is doing here isn't that; it's emphasizing the importance of a third party's usage of the song in an ad, and there's just nothing in the source or the source's reputation to suggest that that's a link the article needs to be making. It comes off as pretty promotional to use a primary and likely non-independent source to highlight the advertisements of specific companies. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:31, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- You seem to conceed theDrum.com. As for iSpot.TV, WP:TV & WP:FILM articles always cite Nielsen Ratings which sells analytics, WP:NSONGS and WP:NALBUMS use as a criteria of notability whether works have been certified, which is a form of analytics as are media sources that produce charting information, which is a form of analytics. What are you talking about?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:17, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- P.S. regarding the commercial use by Toyota, I believe that the combination of the iSpot.TV and Looper are adequate sources for the type of fact at issue. Whether a Toyota commercial existed and aired is a fact that the existence of the commercial itself as a Primary is a valid proof of existence. Not much expertise is required to verify that it existed. It is like saying a baby's name, birth date and its parents' names could be verified by social media, whereas we might require a more reliable source on the baby's place of birth or whether the birth was a medical emergency, etc. The commercial had a name, birth date and parent agency. If we want more sources for stylistic nuances about the commercial a more serious set of sources might be required.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:17, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
Memetic and slang usage
[edit]I notice that in your edit summary reverting a recent change, you say that I "seem to be making it a mission to hatchet the article". I don't think you really addressed the point that the section contains no secondary sources linking the song to the slang, making the section a violation of WP:OR. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 21:55, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- 2021 was a time of high memetic, slang, adlib and viral tiktok usage of the term. The phrase is used in a similar manner in the song to those uses. It clearly is enlightening to the reader to understand the contemporaneous pop culture use of the terms.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:55, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- The spelling of the word, and confusion of origin in the Looper article link the pop culture usage and the song.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:56, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- I don't think that's a reliable source, but The Austin Chronicle gives a passing mention. Maybe you could use that for a single-line section, but if a source doesn't directly mention the song, it should probably be considered extraneous. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 22:09, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- That mention actually tightens up that section.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:32, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- I don't think that's a reliable source, but The Austin Chronicle gives a passing mention. Maybe you could use that for a single-line section, but if a source doesn't directly mention the song, it should probably be considered extraneous. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 22:09, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- While this verstion of the article was nominated at WP:AFD, there were a lot of eyes on it. I added a lot of content in order to get it to pass at WP:AFD and what you seem intent on doing is insisting that since the borderline content that I added to get consensus approval is not top of the line content, you want to now revert the addition of the content that I added after several trips to WP:RSN, WT:SONGS, WT:ALBUMS to get guidance toward consensus approval. I am not going to pretend these are the greatest sources, but this is what we have got and what has gotten consensus approval at AFD after several trips to RSN.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:15, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Well, let's take a look at those RSN discussions. This one got no outside input at all, while this one turned up no consensus for the reliability of the source in question – in fact, consensus arguably leans against its usage as a selfpubbed blog. Consensus at AfD simply means that there are sources to establish notability – it has nothing to do with whether every source is considered reliable, nor what should go into the article. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 22:29, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- Not a bad idea to remove the Banger of the Day for the reasons you state.-22:45, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
GA Review
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Infobox and lead
[edit]- Infobox looks good!
- Add a comma after Surfaces in the first sentence and mention it is from the deluxe edition of the group's fourth studio album, Pacifico (2021)
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:35, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Make the first sentence one with the composer credits, then add a second sentence about the song being recorded at a place fitted with music production equipment
- Done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:21, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "The song was debuted" → "It was debuted"
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:29, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "in 2021 and was released a" → "on July 31, 2021, and was released as a single" to be more specific
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:35, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "and as a viral" → "and a viral"
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:39, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Before the commercial usage sentence, add one about the song's appearance on the New Zealand Hot Singles Chart
- Done--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:47, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "in a variety of ways including" → "in a variety of ways, including"
- Done--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:47, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- "use of the phrase spiked as" → "the phrase spiked as"
- Ok.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:55, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "often in humorous," → "This was often in humorous," as a new sentence to avoid a run-on
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:59, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Pipe ad-lib to Ad libitum
- Ok.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 18:02, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Remove the Central Texas newspaper introduction since that is not needed
- Surfaces is a band with roots at Texas A&M University, which is in Central Texas. We are pesenting the only major newspaper in the country that even gave a cursory reveiw of the song, so we probably should clarify this connection.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 18:05, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Another editor edited this section to remove the newspaper, I moved the Central Texas link to the other section of the article where the newspaper was mentioned.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:19, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- P.S. I am thinking that I could add a phrase Although based in College Station, Texas or Although based in Central Texas to the beginning of the "Production and release" section.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 08:38, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- Surfaces is a band with roots at Texas A&M University, which is in Central Texas. We are pesenting the only major newspaper in the country that even gave a cursory reveiw of the song, so we probably should clarify this connection.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 18:05, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "describes the song's use of" → "described the song's use of"
- I did this as well.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:05, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
Recording and live performance
[edit]- Maybe think of a better title since this also deals with release?
- Is "Production and release" better?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:36, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Mention when the two weeks session was
- I am unable to determine if it was in 2020 or 2021. We know it was at some point before they released the original Pacifico in June 2021. Any advice?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:58, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "They performed at" → "The group performed at"
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:00, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Pipe Universal Music to Universal Music Group
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:07, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Remove the comma before Pacifico
- Comma belongs where it is.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:10, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- "have music composition credits for the song." → "have composer credits."
- sort of.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:15, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- Pipe mixer to Audio mixing (recorded music)
- Wow. Thx for paying such close attention to the links.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:19, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
Reception and charts
[edit]- Would you be able to add the info for a comp section above/merged with this?
- I don't know what you are asking about?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:17, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- Retitle to Reception since commercial is also a form of reception
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:21, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- Wikilink NZ Hot Singles Chart per MOS:LINK2SECT
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:28, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- "note that Verdes contributes" → "noted that Verdes contributes"
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:31, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- Pipe pop to Pop music
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:32, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- Pipe hip-hop to Hip hop music
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:35, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
Use in television
[edit]- "on January 24, 2022 and" → "on January 24, 2022, and"
- I think MOS is trumping grammar there, but I went with it.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:47, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- "audiences as well as" → "audiences, as well as"
- thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:50, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
- "TikTok, Snapchat, Twitch" → "TikTok, Snapchat, and Twitch"
- OK.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:52, 29 December 2022 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks fab at 5.7%!!!!
- !!-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:32, 31 December 2022 (UTC)
- Refs 2 and 5 are basically duplicates
- merged.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:41, 31 December 2022 (UTC)
- Onairwithryan.iheart.com → On Air With Ryan iHeart on ref 3
- OK--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:50, 31 December 2022 (UTC)
- Elitedaily.com → Elite Daily on ref 4 with the wikilink and fix MOS:QWQ issues
- Don't understand QWQ issue. Which quote?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:12, 1 January 2023 (UTC)
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 6
- Again, don't understand QWQ issue. Which quote?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:22, 1 January 2023 (UTC)
- Beyondthestagemagazine.com → Beyond The Stage Magazine on ref 8
- OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:26, 1 January 2023 (UTC)
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 11 and cite Universal Music Canada as publisher instead, piping to Universal Music Group
- Again, don't understand QWQ issue. Which quote?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:44, 1 January 2023 (UTC)
- Remove wikilink on Universal Music for ref 12
- Fixed-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:44, 1 January 2023 (UTC)
- Ref 13 only has an editorial team of three; why is it a reliable source?
- Not. In fact several sources have release dates earlier than 9/6. A few sources mention 9/3 (including https://musicboard.app/album/246675591/reviews?order_by=helpful). SoundCloud uses an August 31 date. They are probably reliable.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:06, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- Allmusic → AllMusic on ref 14 with the wikilink
- Someone has already done this.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:23, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- Cite Pitchfork as work/website instead on ref 16
- OK (website).-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:26, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- Remove or replace ref 17 per WP:SELFPUB
- Hmm. OK. (reluctantly).TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:26, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- TheDrum.com → The Drum on ref 20
- Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:28, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- Formatting of Ispot.tv needs to be consistent for refs 18 and 21
- Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:31, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- Pipe Channel3000 to WISC-TV on ref 22
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:36, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
- OK. So I need feedback on about a half dozen issues above.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:36, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
External links
[edit]- Good
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 21:36, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
- Thx for the extensive review.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 12:57, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- User:Kyle Peake, I have a few questions.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:45, 3 January 2023 (UTC)
- TonyTheTiger Regarding incomplete points, the composers should be mentioned in the lead's recording sentence rather than the first one, comma is not needed before Pacifco since that is not the lead, adding info for a section meant composition of the song and QWQ issues refers to when you have used double speech marks ("") in ref titles. --K. Peake 20:22, 3 January 2023 (UTC)
- What about the first two issues in the "Recording and live performance" section?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:11, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- Also in that section, I am using the comma to set off a parenthetical phrase.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:14, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- In the background section, I discussed Central Texas. feedback awaited.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:15, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- Further needed on first topic of "Reception and charts" section.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:16, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- WP:QWQ handled.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:23, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
- TonyTheTiger I left those points unanswered because I felt they were fine so needed no further response; apologies if you found this rude. Also, I already replied to the reception and charts query by mentioning that you should add info for a composition section; this is almost good to go now. --K. Peake 08:51, 6 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake:, OK. I just added a Texas point to add meaning to the Central Texas element. What type of content would go in a composition section?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 14:35, 6 January 2023 (UTC)
- TonyTheTiger Composition section would be meant for music and lyrics, or only one if you cannot add both with the info available. --K. Peake 11:21, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake:, I have pretty much milked all available sourced info on the song. I would not know where to find additional content. Would you prefer that I carve out a composition section from the content currently in Production and release. You are free to make this adjustment as well.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 12:56, 7 January 2023 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, it is acceptable with the background and production/release sections including some comp info! --K. Peake 15:02, 7 January 2023 (UTC)