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@WritingMan: This looks good. Some thoughts

  • Don't start with "widely but incorrectly considered", let the first sentence say who she was (Austrian, or Israeli physicist). Also leave Olga Steindler out of the lead - you already established that Freud wasn't first, if someone wants to know who was first, I think that's best left for the body of the article.
  • I don't love Baptized a Protestant, Selma Freud was... - it feels very German to me, I can hear the accent when I read it. I think it's better to start with Selma Freud was the daughter of... and mention her religion later. Is there some specific significance here? I could see that with the connection to the Salvation Army, but it feels a little disconnected.
  • Reading more, the construct of the translation is still very German. A lot of it needs to be re-written. It might be a bit early for feedback yet. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:11, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]