Talk:See You Again (Miley Cyrus song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Novice7 Talk 04:23, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
As always ipodnano, it is really good. Just some minor issues.
- Lead
- Although a music video for the song was never filmed, it was given a promotional — doesn't quite convey the message. How 'bout Although an official music video..?
- Done
- Background
- Many people already know who Miley is, so, I suggest merging the first two sentences.
- I think it's better now. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:29, 16 December 2010 (UTC)
- credited to her birth name — shouldn't it be credited by her birth name?
- No. I don't think so. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:27, 16 December 2010 (UTC)
- How 'bout a she said or Cyrus said after "It's just O.K."?
- Done
- to the finished product, changed her mind — needs a "she" after the comma.
- Done
- it was released August 11, 2008 — it was released "on" August 11, 2008.
- Done
- I suggest merging the clause to the sentence to something like "Also referred to as the "See You Again" (2008 Remix), it was released August 11, 2008 as the second single from Breakout, in countries where the original was not issued."
- Done
- Composition
- "The song is set in common time" — the time signature of common time".
- Done
- Critical reception
- Alas, FM, better late than never", he finished — finished? how about he concluded?
- Done
- Chart performance
- If Australian debut date is provided, it'd be better.
- Done
- The song tied with "The Climb" and — The song "is" tied with..
- Done
- Live performances
- She bared a yellow.. — bared is good, but I say "wore" because it'd be easy for readers to conceive.
- Yeah, your totally right. Done -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:27, 16 December 2010 (UTC)
- Continuing United States promotion for the song, Cyrus performed the song on — Reword to something like "She also performed the song.."
- Done
- "See You Again" was part — was also a part
- Done
- Cyrus and several backup dancers begin the performance on the upper level of the stage, where they proceed down a ramp as they perform dance routines. Cyrus and the backup dancers roam throughout the stage for the remainder of the performance. — shouldn't this be in past tense?
- Yes, oops, are my cheeks red? lol. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:27, 16 December 2010 (UTC)
- Done
- The second para needs to be changed to past tense.
- Where is it not past tense in the second paragraph? I can't find it. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:27, 16 December 2010 (UTC)
- Cover versions
- Breathe Carolina included their version of "See You Again" in their respective set list for the Warped Tour 2009. — remove the "in their respective"
- Done
- Track listings
- A refimprove tag. Hmm.. provide sources.
- Done
- References and Links
- Four dab links — Check
- Done
- Media and stability
- No edit wars
- All media of fair quality.
- No other issues.. Very well done. I'm putting this "On Hold". Novice7 Talk 14:48, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
- Pass! Novice7 | Talk 04:19, 16 December 2010 (UTC)