Talk:Sea urchin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Basilosauridae (talk · contribs) 05:18, 2 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This article contains great, detailed information on sea urchins. I hope the article with be revised and re-nominated. The overall reasons that I failed the article are:

1. Grammar. This article contains many run-on sentences and other grammatical errors.

Checked and copy-edited; no fused sentences, however. Some apparent issues may be British English; and in all forms of English, many uses of conjunctions and relative pronouns are not errors.

2. The tone does not meet encyclopedic standards. For example, the article currently states "Sea urchins have conquered most sea habitats...", which doesn't meet encyclopedic standards for discussing organisms.

Removed.

3. Includes several of what seem like personal observations that aren't supported by citations. For example "At first glance, sea urchins often appear incapable of moving."

Removed.

Some more minor observations:

-some formatting issues with the text associated with the main image.

Fixed.

-in the first section it states that sea urchins are found in all zones, but adult sea urchins are strictly benthic to my knowledge.

Fixed.

-The section on diversity lacks sufficient citations

Fixed.

@Basilosauridae: Thank you for taking on this review which I see is your first review. Few articles are perfect when nominated. It is the custom when reviewing nominations to list the aspects you find unsatisfactory and give the nominator a chance to put them right, putting the article on hold for a period to allow improvements to be made. You will find instructions for reviewers here. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:03, 2 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I'll do that Basilosauridae (talk) 06:05, 2 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 11:30, 2 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Passed

Thanks for revising the article. I removed one sentence in the introduction which I felt was a bit speculative and uncited. Overall, great job! Basilosauridae (talk) 15:37, 2 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:10, 2 June 2018 (UTC) and from me Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:24, 2 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]