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GA Review

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 00:49, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]


Preamble from Vami

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Political journalism and advocacy

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  • Some were indifferent to it, while Republican attorney Sigal Chattah saw it as a positive and referred to Ashton-Cirillo as a "unicorn". "Unicorn" may need a footnote or a link to wikitionary since while everyone knows what a unicorn is, the reader might not be familiar with its use in this context.
    plus Added link to Wiktionary. -- Tamzin[cetacean needed] (she|they|xe) 15:37, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Also worth introducing the Proud Boys. As of time of writing, the people reading this article are almost certainly going to know who they are, but we can't assume that for future readers or readers unfamiliar with contemporary American politics.
    plus Added brief explanation in body and even briefer explanation in lede. -- Tamzin[cetacean needed] (she|they|xe) 15:37, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • This led Ashton-Cirillo to contact a group of far-right activists, at least one of whom was a member of the Proud Boys. [...] One of those banned was a Proud Boy who Ashton-Cirillo had contacted when recruiting for the Clark County rally. Are these the same guy?
    It's actually not 100% clear to me? The way I read Scherer 2021, probably, but it's a bit complicated because initially the article doesn't name who A-C contacted, and then later says Yankley (the banned party in question) was on her list and is a self-described Proud Boy. @Theleekycauldron: Any thoughts? -- Tamzin[cetacean needed] (she|they|xe) 15:37, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • [...] Ashton-Cirillo haled him at a press conference [...] Did you mean "hailed" here?
     Fixed -- Tamzin[cetacean needed] (she|they|xe) 15:37, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Foreign journalism and military service

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GA progress

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Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
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