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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Samuel Girard (ice hockey)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 22:50, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 22:50, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Some of the references that are in French should have |language=French in their templates.  Done
  • Some of the references seem to be missing |publisher=. Done
  • Like others said on Discord, the lead should be a bit longer. Maybe talk more about his playing career, with the Preds and Avs? Done
  • "Guylaine Dion" Didn't find her birth name in the article cited. Done
  • Midget hockey is minkey, right? Minor ice hockey, right. Done
  • "Girard moved in with Julie Robitaille" Best to mention her as a power skating coach here. Done
  • "$35 million contract extension with the Avalanche, carrying an annual average of $5 million, on July 31, 2019, Girard." End of this sentence is missing something. Done
  • Maybe add his hobby of relaxing to his personal life section. (what hobby?)
  • References needed for All-Rookie Team and First All-Star Team nominations in the table. Done

Not too much to fix. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 02:52, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done except for one. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 03:21, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Nova Crystallis, should be g2g. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 04:01, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk15:32, 7 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Girard with the Avalanche in 2020
Girard with the Avalanche in 2020
  • Reviewed: TBD
  • Comment: Could this possibly run on May 12, his birthday?

Improved to Good Article status by HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk). Self-nominated at 05:21, 4 April 2020 (UTC).[reply]

  • I'll be claiming this for review and noting a preference for ALT2 as the hook that appeals most even to non-hockey fans, although I'd suggest proposing additional hooks as well as perhaps revising ALT2 to give more context as to who Girard is and what he did during his career. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 11:18, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Narutolovehinata5, thanks for looking it over. Ya, I was worried they'd be too niche so I have dropped some alts below. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 11:34, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the new suggestions, but I think sticking to a wording more similar to ALT2 would still be a better option. ALT2a doesn't even mention his brother anymore, and neither of the new hooks mention that his brother played the sport as well which I thought was part of the appeal of the original. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 11:41, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. I'm assuming good faith for the sources used as the NY Times article is paywalled for me and I had to use the French source to verify it (Google Translate seems to confirm it, however). ALT2c is almost good to go, however it could probably be revised slightly as the hook implies that he only got into the NHL because his brother quit playing ice hockey, but from the article it appears that his brother quit when they were young while the subject didn't reach the NHL until later. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 09:47, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
You're right but I was implying he would never had made it to the NHL if his brother didn't give up the sport because the family couldn't afford both. Also, thanks for AGF but I believe if you put the NYT URL into the Wayback Machine you should be able to bypass the paywall. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 19:04, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
While accurate, I'm not sure if it would be acceptable to others on DYK given that the connection isn't exactly direct. I'm willing to accept it, but I'm worried that if I did, the nomination could stall once it's about to be sent to prep due to possible accuracy concerns. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 13:01, 9 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Narutolovehinata5, that is a very fair point. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 21:36, 9 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Almost almost there. I really like ALT2d and I think we should be good to go with that one, my only remaining suggestion is to change "able to play" to "able to continue playing" to reflect the article text. In the interest of DYK review purposes, I'm noting that the article meets the other DYK requirements (promoted to GA on time, adequately sourced, free of close paraphrasing with the only flag being a quote that's cited inline). Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:14, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Narutolovehinata5, fair enough. Alright, so the final proposed hook is
ALT2da:... that National Hockey League defenceman Samuel Girard (pictured) was only able to continue playing ice hockey after his older brother gave up the sport? HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:24, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. ALT2da is good to go; image is also fine if the promoter decides to use it. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:46, 10 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]