Talk:SM U-21 (Germany)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 06:23, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I will post a review shortly. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 06:23, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

This article looks like it is in pretty good shape. I made a few tweaks (please check that you are happy with those changes), and have the following suggestions for improvement: AustralianRupert (talk) 08:11, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

in the lead, it says the boat was under tow when it sank in 1919, but the body of the article does not seem to say this;
- Added to the body, good catch.
in the infobox, it says the boat was laid down in 1911, but in the body of the article it says 1910;
- Must have been a typo, fixed now.
in the infobox "4 x 50 cm (19.7 in) torpedo" v. in the body "50 centimeter (20 in)";
- Fixed the rounding error in the body.
"In early August, Hersing took U-21 on a..." Hersing has not been fully introduced at this point, can you please explain who he was and, if possible, include his full name?
- Huh, I thought I had done that - must have fallen out in the revision of the article.
this sentence appears to be missing something: "On 14 August, a second patrol, this time in company with her sister boats U-19 and U-22, to the northern North Sea between Norway and Scotland."
- Fixed
this sentence seems a little awkward: "Hersing was forced to run his U-boat on the surface to conserve fuel, and while en route the Germans managed to escape from patrolling British and French torpedo boats and transport ships that might report their location."
- See how it reads now.
Kotor is overlinked;
- Fixed
why is von Trapp's visit significant?
- I figured because he's Austria-Hungary's most famous U-boat commander (not to mention of Sound of Music fame) that it was worthy of mentioning
  - No worries, I'd suggest adding a quick clause about who he was, though. For instance, "...visited by Georg von Trapp, an Austrian U-boat commander..." or something similar. AustralianRupert (talk) 11:13, 15 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Destroyer is overlinked;
- Fixed
GRT appears to be overlinked in the Return to the North Sea section. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:11, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed the template. Thanks for reviewing the article! Parsecboy (talk) 12:26, 11 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - G'day, your changes look good. I have a minor follow up point regarding von Trapp, but I'm happy that the article meets the GA criteria, so I will pass it now and you can respond in your leisure. Thanks for your hard work. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 11:13, 15 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]