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GA Review

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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 14:55, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I am reviewing this article and it quite well written. I have only a few comments:

"1912 followed a similar pattern, though the summer cruise to Norway was interrupted by the Agadir crisis" - suggest rewording so sentence doesn't start with a number
- Fixed. Parsecboy (talk) 15:02, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"and straddled Indomitable several times" - is "straddled" in this context a ship term?
- It's used frequently in this context to describe a salvo of shells falling around a ship (i.e, some on one side, some on the other). Do you have any ideas how this could be made clearer? Parsecboy (talk) 15:02, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - "Fired several near misses"? Buggie111 (talk) 15:21, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"They departed for the Åland Islands on the following morning. Åland was to be a forward operating base, from which the port of Hanko would be secured, following an assault on the capital of Helsingfors." - I think I know what you mean, but perhaps it could be clearer.
- How does it look now? Parsecboy (talk) 15:02, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Xtzou (Talk) 14:55, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good and I am passing the article. Xtzou (Talk) 15:26, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality: Clearly and concisely written

B. MoS compliance: Complies with required elements of MoS
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources: Reliable sources

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: Well referenced

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects: Sets the context

B. Focused: Remains focused on the topic
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: Pass!