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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 03:06, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
I will take a gander at this one shortly. Zawed (talk) 03:06, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:18, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
- Haha, I guess I need to get to writing so you guys can stop fighting over reviews ;) Parsecboy (talk) 10:48, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
- Strange, I'd have sworn that I started the review on these, but obviously not. I was really tired last night, so I can blame fatigue.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:25, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
Sorry, Sturm, I beat you to claiming this one. Anyway, this is a pretty trim and tidy article with few issues. My comments:
- In the lead: "Dissatisfied with the numerous accidents, the..". I think it would be better to say incidents, it seems strange to refer to boiler fires as accidents (I think of ships colliding and so forth as accidents).
- Service history: the Danzig Bay: don't think the "the" should be there.
- Fixed - sometimes my mind gets stuck in German mode
- Friedrich Wilhelm IV and Karl boarded the ship...: suggest for avoidance of doubt "Prince Karl".
- Done
- they stopped in the Jade Bay: another one where the the doesn't sound right here.
- Fixed
- References: Heathcote needs a location, and it is my understanding we don't need company details as part of the publisher's name, i.e. the Ltd does need to be part of the name.
- Good catch
- Images look to be appropriately tagged.
- No dupe links, no dabs
- One of the Cats is Ships built in Millwall, but it was built in Prussia?
- No, Danzig was built in Prussia - it was originally to have been built at Millwall, but Adalbert wanted to build it in Prussia to gain experience for the shipbuilding industry - he ordered the two Nixes from Millwall as part of the deal to get their help building Danzig
- Ah, I didn't quite parse that sentence correctly, I understand now. Zawed (talk) 09:05, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
- No, Danzig was built in Prussia - it was originally to have been built at Millwall, but Adalbert wanted to build it in Prussia to gain experience for the shipbuilding industry - he ordered the two Nixes from Millwall as part of the deal to get their help building Danzig
That's it for me. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:31, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks Zawed. Parsecboy (talk) 10:48, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
- I have tweaked the lead as it seems my comment on this was overlooked. I am satisfied that this article meets the GA criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:05, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
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