Talk:Runaway Daydreamer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiRedactor (talk · contribs) 16:20, 22 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to review this article, my comments will be here shortly! WikiRedactor (talk) 16:20, 22 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

General

No problematic disambiguation links
No problematic external links
For good practice, I suggest adding an alternate text description for the cover, although this is not required for GANs.
Can you replace {{reflist|20em}} with {{reflist|30em}}?
To dress up the article a bit, is there a picture of SEB or Harcourt that would match the article's content?

Done

Structure

I would suggest creating a "Release and promotion" section, which talks about its radio edit, music video, and television performances.
This would mean that the remaining content could be merged into a "Composition and reception" section, since to me it seems like much of the song analysis reads like a secondary review section anyway.
If possible, it would also be nice to have a "Credits and personnel" section with a list mentioning engineers, mixers, etc. as mentioned in the liner notes.
It would also be nice if we could also get a "Release history" section in here, just to have the radio and digital download release dates available at a quick glance.

Done

Promotion

Can you clarify that "Young Blood" was an earlier single?

Done

Infobox and introduction

Can you write out Sophie Ellis-Bextor in the "Writers" field and Ed Harcourt in the "Producers" field?
You can drop the "the" before "English recording artist".

This article is written in British English, so I actually can't remove it.

Can you move the mention of its release as a single before its writers, composition, etc? I think it might be more useful for readers to know its release status before more in-depth information.

Composition

I believe the reviewer commented on SEB's "artistic freedom", not "creative freedom" as the article currently says.

Done

No major concerns here, after these comments are addressed I'll check back in! WikiRedactor (talk) 16:37, 22 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiRedactor: I think I've done everything.

— prism △ 21:48, 22 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good to me, I'm happy to pass this article, good work! WikiRedactor (talk) 22:10, 23 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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