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Reviewer: AaronY (talk) 08:34, 8 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think I can address my concerns about this one by just editing the article. I'll leave comments here later, also please look at my edit summaries to see what I changed. AaronY (talk) 08:34, 8 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, the main problems for me in this article were excessive detail, which I notice in a lot of your articles and which bogs down the narrative imho, and prose problems.
The main concerns in the previous review by User:Grsz11 were that you included time sensitive material in the lead. The case against this is that its not updated enough in many cases. Since you are one of the most active contributors on this project, if not the most active, I believe you'll keep it updated. The other concern was comprehensiveness. Through my experience a while back with William Fuller (American football), I think the length is fine, but I am going to put it on hold to see if we can get any information about his family, at least his parents names, maybe their professions, and if he has any siblings, etc. The last concern in the other review was that the article would not even survive afd, but given his accomplishments this year thats no longer an issue. AaronY (talk) 10:32, 8 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I have removed what may have been considered excessive detail and added all the personal information I could find at this time.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:02, 8 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Well I had already removed what I considered excessive detail myself, so if you want to put that football info back in its fine by me. I'm passing this article. I changed one last detail; in the lead it said he finished first in the Big Ten in receiving yards in 2010, but in the body it says he finished third. I changed the figure in the lead, maybe you can check that. AaronY (talk) 20:35, 8 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]