Talk:Ronnie Amadi

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A fact from Ronnie Amadi appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 16 March 2017 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that gridiron football player Ronnie Amadi played alongside his brother, Donnie Amadi, in high school and college?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2017/March. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Ronnie Amadi.

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GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 01:59, 23 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"Amadi was designated a redshirt and didn't play" - Change didn't to did not
We could add his AFL stats to the prose with this reference
"Amadi was also a member of the New York Dragons and the Tulsa Talons of the AFL" - He was also a member of the Blizzard and Destroyers. Or we could change "was a member" to "played".
Lowercase the reference titles that use all caps.
"Amadi played arena football for several professional and developmental league teams" The Blizzard was the only developmental league team he played for.
"Kansas also recruited his brother whom he played with in high school" Do we need a comma after "brother". I'm not 100% sure if we do.
Perhaps merge the sentence about college track to the Kansas football paragraph.
Perhaps we can wikilink some of the newspapers in the reference section that have articles.
Found the reference "Where has NU's 'A' game gone". It says "KU also got its first TD off a blocked punt in two years. The same two people who did it then — Ronnie Amadi on the block and Darren Rus on the return — pulled that trick again. In the same end zone". Perhaps we could note this is some way. The article currently only indicates that he blocked one punt.
Looks like he's a model now. Do you think this is worth adding? [1][2][3][4]

If you disagree with anything, feel free to say. Some of these things may be open to interpretation. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 01:59, 23 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comment @BU Rob13: It's been nearly a month. Are you currently able to take care of this? If not, I may be able to since these seem relatively simple. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 21:50, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Bcschneider53: If you're able to help out, that would be extremely appreciated. I'm neck-deep in administrative stuff and real life lately. ~ Rob₁₃^Talk 21:54, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Per Rob's request above, I'll do my best to take over then. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 22:05, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, thanks. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 22:06, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: I did my best and believe everything has been taken care of. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 22:43, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Bcschneider53: Do you think we need a comma after the brother thing? Also, do you think "making for the second time the two" would sound better as "marking the second time the two" WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 22:59, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Also, when I was talking about adding the stats, I actually meant to write it in a sentence but the table will do. I've added the sentences myself. Also, where did you find that table? Lol, it looks eerily familiar. :) WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:03, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Also, it might be pedantic but that source doesn't say when he started modeling. This says "In 2010, Ronnie found interest in Modeling because of several friends told him he needs to be modeling and not playing football. Luckily he took their advice and pursued it". However, it also says "Joined: May 20, 2009". His LinkedIn says "Trainer, Coach, Model, Actor Body By Amadi January 2008 – Present", even though Jan 2008 might not be the start of his modelling career. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:18, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Done the two suggestions. Since there appears to be a conflict when it comes to the start of his career, I'd say we should just omit the date. Also, the table was a combination of James Romain's table and the 2010 Sylvania 300, the latter of which I used as a template for placement of the source.
Also, FYI, your ping of me did not work. You must ping me and sign in the same edit. Of course, I added this to my watchlist, but something to keep in mind for the future :) --Bcschneider53 (talk) 23:22, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe we could write it as "Amadi has also spent time as a model" or "Amada has also began a career as a model". Also, for the brother, I just meant to add a comma after brother so that it would be like "brother, whom he played with". It now says "brother, with whom he played". Which one do you think sounds better? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:30, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Also in regards to his modeling career, I wasn't suggesting we add the date. I meant that the article currently says "After retiring from football, Amadi began a career as a model". But the source doesn't say it was after he retired. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:37, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

- "With whom sounds better to me so as to avoid ending a clause with a preposition. I'll tweak the model bit. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 23:49, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The article has now been passed. Congratulations, BU Rob13 and Bcschneider53! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:59, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]