Talk:Robert Mallard/GA2

GA Review

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Nominator: Roastedbeanz1 (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 21:36, 21 March 2024 (UTC)

Review

I will review this article. I may need to do some editing for expediency if you will allow it. Bruxton (talk) 21:36, 21 March 2024 (UTC)

My opinion is that this article is a long way from meeting our Wikipedia:Good article criteria for a GA.

1. The prose needs to be developed
2. The page numbers of every book need to be stated
3. Many citations do not seem to support the information
4. The article is not complete and does not follow an expected order.
5. I do not think the article is B class but I see that you rated it as a c and then upgraded it yourself to a B

Please do not get discouraged. Continue to take the suggestions of reviewers and improve the article. I was going to give it a go, but we are too far from GAN ready. Bruxton (talk) 14:20, 22 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

? We should not have citations in the lead per wp:leadcite. The lead should be summary and the items in the lead should be in the body and cited there.

Sections

? needs work. Standard practice would be to remove the biography heading and change prior life to early life

? Sections should be chronological and we should develop them. Have we said all there is to say about his early life?

? Can we add a personal life section to the bottom?

Grammar

? "elementary school with John and two of Amy's cousin's:" consider "cousins"

? "When sheriff R. E. Gray arrived to the scene," Consider capitalize Sheriff and arrived at. "When Sheriff R. E. Gray arrived at the scene,

? "Angelina, and William fled for Savannah, Georgia" consider "fled to"

? "After the surrenders," should just be "surrender"

? "and the group shot the vehicle with pistols, which killed Mallard.[9][10] When sheriff R. E. Gray arrived to the scene, they searched Amy's pocketbook and the vehicle.[11][8]" In my opinion this is not enough information. please develop this. And perhaps let the reader know more about the shooting and why this last sentence is important.

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Citations

? "The car was stopped by a group of about 20 members of the Ku Klux Klan" I cannot find this in the source.

? "Robert Childs Mallard[1] was born c. 1911.[2] He was a traveling casket salesman[3]". Is it necessary to clutter the sentence with a citation every few words? See WP:CONSECUTIVECITE

? "Mallard lived on a 35-acre farm he gained from his wife, Amy James Mallard's, white stepfather-in-law[4]" Citation four does not support this sentence from what I can see. You also do not provide a page number.

? Citations 5 and 6 do not provide page numbers.

? The first paragraph of Aftermath has one Time citation which does not support the information.

? The second paragraph of Aftermath has two citaions. The second one Defending White Democracy: The Making of a Segregationist... I cannot find the information because no page number is given

? "began an unofficial investigation. His investigation led police to five people. They surrendered, and two of the men were indicted for the murder; Ku Klux Klan members William L. "Spud" Howell, and Roderick Clifton.[16]" this citation does not seem to support the sentence

? "After the surrenders, fires broke out in the local black business area.[17][18][19]" unable to confirm this information in the given sources

Images

? We can see if an image can be found, and it can be included here under Fair Use

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Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

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