Talk:Richard III of England/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 16:27, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 16:27, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
2
2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y (39.4% is highest, due to incidental mirror of titles.)
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
5
5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No Dead links N "Leicester's King Richard III Visitor Centre and original burial site" is dead
Images appropriately licensed Y
Citation issues: His motto was Loyaulte me lie, "Loyalty binds me"; and his personal device was a white boar. Needs a citation.
@Isananni:. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:59, 19 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Prose Suggestions

@Iazyges: I added the requested ref to the motto and personal device part. I could not trace the dead link, would you be so kind to mention the section where the dead link is located so that I can see if I can replace it with a new one or if it is redundant and we can do without it? There are several references to both the Visitor Centre and the burial site in the article and the other ones do not seem to be dead. Thanks in advance for your feedback. Isananni (talk) 10:26, 21 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Isananni: I've replaced the dead link. Will start on prose suggestions. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:52, 21 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lede

Richard was struck down in the conflict, making him the last English king to die in battle. Henry Tudor then ascended the throne as Henry VII. suggest you change this to Richard was slain in the conflict, making him the last English king to die in battle. Henry Tudor then ascended the throne as Henry VII.

@Iazyges: Done. Isananni (talk) 15:04, 21 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

While at Warwick's estate, he probably met Francis Lovell, a strong supporter later in his life, and Warwick's younger daughter, his future wife Anne Neville. suggest While at Warwick's estate, he is believed to have met (or likely) met Francis Lovell, who would be a firm supporter of Richard later in his life, and Warwick's younger daughter, his future wife Anne Neville.

@Iazyges: Done almost entirely. Likely and probably are very similar and probably is more common, whereas "he is believed to have met" sounds a bit heavy with respect to a more straightforware "he probably met". I included the rest of your suggestion. Isananni (talk) 15:04, 21 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Isananni: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 13:02, 21 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]