Talk:Reproductive system/GA1
GA Review
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I am going to give this article a Fail, and would like to explain why. The big problem is a lack of structure -- there are lots of useful facts here, but they are not arranged in a useful way. The article constantly switches abruptly from one type of information to a different type of information, with no transitions or other elements that would clue a reader as to what will come next. The lack of organization brings with it other problems, such as using words before defining them: "gamete" is an example.
If I were writing this article, I would probably start by explaining the problem of reproduction at an abstract level -- the problem being to bring together an egg and sperm and then nourish and protect the resulting embryo until it is capable of surviving on its own. I would then describe the various possible ways of solving this problem, first conceptually and then in terms of implementation. Finally I would describe the specific features of the human system and the ways it can go wrong -- although there is an argument that such information might better be placed in an article of its own.
There are no doubt other frameworks that could be used for organization -- the point is that some stronger framework needs to be implemented. Looie496 (talk) 21:58, 14 December 2008 (UTC)