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GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:26, 22 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

General

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WP:LEAD
  • "had her eyes set", "on the Hollywood radar" sound unencyclopedic and colloquial

re-worded the latter. However, I could not find the "had her eyes set" in the earlier part on the article. Could you point out what section it is in?

    • It was in the 2nd sentence of this version. It has been corrected.
  • Link York U here not later in the text.

done

clarified

Early life

done

fixed Crystal Clear x3 06:20, 26 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Early 2000s
  • scoring is an unencyclopedic verb choice in this use. Same with "take down"

fixed

  • Mention what country and network Slings and Arrows is for since we just talked about her transitioning to her first US film

done

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  • Almost no facts require more than three sources for verification ([20][21][22][23]). Either work in more detail from the sources to make their relevance clear or trim this down.

fixed

  • In paragraph 2, you start talking about The Notebook without naming it. It may even deserve its own paragraph, but I can't tell when you stop talking about Mean Girls.

fixed

  • viewer-voted sounds wrong. People's choice probably sounds better.

done

  • "remaining her top domestic grossing film at over $209.5 million" needs to be rephrased. It sounds like it was her top hit before she was in it and remained so afterwards.

clarified

--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:29, 27 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

      • Done
2006–present
  • 287,000 needs units.

done

  • link New York Post

done

  • Elaborate on clash

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  • Ungrammatical: McAdams found this role to be a departure from previous parts[50] enjoyed doing her own stunts as it is the closest thing she has to playing sports.

fixed --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:37, 27 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

In the media
  • link Entertainment Weekly

done

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      • Did I miss this?
Personal life
  • Do we know what type of Green Card she has?

clarified

  • The phrase "cable connection" sounds foreign to me.

fixed

  • I'd consider linking environmental awareness, vegetarian and Kensington Market (if it has one).

done

--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:46, 27 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA checklist

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Probably a GA already. I just need to make a final runthrough and check the images

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    By being so early in her career, this article seems less broad than GAs of other actress, but I think it is fairly complete.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    I have to do an image review
    All images need {{Personality rights}} tags.
    The first two WP:CAPTIONs need to be adjusted. If they are not complete sentences, they should not end in a period.
Done
  1. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Good job. I am pleased to pass this now.