Talk:Pyramids of Mars/GA1
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Nominator: DoctorWhoFan91 (talk · contribs) 08:58, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 22:22, 13 January 2025 (UTC)
I'll take this one on. Bit busy over the next week so this may take a hot minute, but I should be able to get it done sometime within the next seven days. Magneton Considerer: Pokelego999 (Talk) (Contribs) 22:22, 13 January 2025 (UTC)
Six GA Criteria
[edit]1. Article is well-written. Very minimal mistakes if any at all.
2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.
3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the character.
4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.
5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.
6. Article uses one fair use image with proper rationale.
Lead
[edit]-"in England and Egypt, and on Mars, in 1911." Can be changed to "set in the year 1911 in England, Egypt, and Mars."
- Done
-Per MOS:SLASH remove the slash.
- Reworded. Per my reading of it, and how it's used in Doctor who articles, I believe it should be fine after the rewording
Plot
[edit]-"Following another attack by robots" The robots are not mentioned before now, so this comes out of nowhere.
- Mentioned them beforehand now
-I'd use "servant" instead of "thrall" for simplicity's sake.
- the meaning is closer to a thrall, than a servant, so I would prefer to keep thrall
-"the Doctor's respiratory bypass system allows him to recover, and becoming free of Sutekh's control." Remove comma and put in the present tense.
- Done
Production
[edit]-What is the UNIT dating controversy, and how does this episode contribute to it? This is not explained in the article.
- Removed, it was present before I edited, and I could not find sources talking about it.
-Does Horror of Frankenstein need italics or quotes? Either way, one of them is needed.
- Italicsed
-Italicize Doctor Who.
- Done
-Who is George Tovey? We know his relation to Roberta, but we don't know his role in the episode or why he was casted.
- Removed, looks like it's just trivia, though it gets mentioned a lot in diff sources
-Put Woolf's info in the same paragraph as the one below it.
- Done
-What is the importance of Victoria? As a casual audience I wouldn't know what her role is or why she's relevant.
- added "former companion"
-"The flame effect at the end" Where is this in the episode? When Sutekh is being sent forward in time? Specify this.
- Added "end of serial", as flames are mentioned in the plot
Broadcast and reception
[edit]-Italicize Gizmodo.
- Done
-Do any sources specify the critical acclaim mentioned in the article's lead?
- That's how it's usually written when there are no bad reviews and very good reviews; I have not seen any article needing a ref for the words critical acclaim
-The analysis of Egyptian elements should be mentioned in the lead given two book sources discuss it in significant depth.
- Added
Commercial releases
[edit]-Unless the book cover serves a particular purpose, it should be probably be deleted since it serves a purely decorative purpose in the article.
- Deleted
Overall
[edit]-Looks solid. Fix the above and I'll start the spotcheck. Magneton Considerer: Pokelego999 (Talk) (Contribs) 16:09, 17 January 2025 (UTC)
- Pokelego999 replied to all issues. Thanks for the review. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 21:07, 17 January 2025 (UTC)
- @DoctorWhoFan91 A few minor things:
- -I asked about critical acclaim mostly because the book sources seem to contain some negative commentary of aspects of the episode, which to me doesn't indicate critical acclaim unless it's verified elsewhere
- -Link the definition of thrall on Wikitionary, since it's a pretty obscure word Magneton Considerer: Pokelego999 (Talk) (Contribs) 21:25, 17 January 2025 (UTC)
- It's "widespread", not "universal" though- and even the criticism is due to one element, which also comes out the analysis of egyptian influence, so I don't think it should be an issue with widespread instead of universal being used.
- Done the wikt link. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 21:38, 17 January 2025 (UTC)