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GA Review

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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.


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Reviewer: Robin (talk · contribs) 00:00, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

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Lead/Background and production

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  • The lead needs to cover its critical reception, live performances, and chart performance.
  • to the love of his girl. --> to the love of his significant other, as it sounds more formal (just a suggestion).
  • Timberlake's manager Johnny Wright stated that although in the project were involved artists who are also primarily and Timberlake's friends it was tough keeping the album a secret, making them use codenames for the project --- This doesn't make sense.

Composition/critical reception

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  • Is 411mania a credible source?
  • These sections both follow the same template of author-of-publication. To keep the prose fresh, I suggest using formats that I've used at Gotta Be You (One Direction song)#Critical reception.
  • Using the word "wrote" is also a recurring trend in both sections. I suggest using words such as appreciate, favor, opine, describe, classify, commended, lauded, and credited.
  • Genevieve Koski of The A.V. Club called "Pusher Love Girl" the album's best track.[26] MSN Music's Robert Christgau also cited it as a highlight on the album. --- Could these sentences be merged. Also, did these reviewers say why they favoured the song?
  • The critical recep section needs to be formatted into 2 or 3 paragraphs.

Live performances

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  • He performed the song live at the 55th Annual Grammy Awards on February 11, 2013.[33] Timberlake performed the song on Late Night with Jimmy Fallon on March 12, 2013.[34] Timberlake performed the song at the SXSW MySpace Secret Show on March 17, 2013 ---- These sentences need to be merged. See, for example, how editors did so at Single_Ladies_(Put_a_Ring_on_It)#Live_performances's fifth sentence.
  • Unlink the 55th Annual Grammy Awards as well.

Refs

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  • Various refs have issues. As you're an experienced editor, I expect you to fix them without me telling you how.
  • Note; I don't care if you add publisher parameters, just follow one template for the entire article.

Final examination

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Lead

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  • such as heroin, cocaine, plum wine, MDMA and nicotine, to the love of his significant other. --- this reads quite tedious. Does the lead really need to cite 5 narcotics?
  • "Pusher Love Girl" received generally positive reviews from contemporary music critics, many of which cited it as being the best song on The 20/20 Experience. Some critics, however, were critical of the song's length and it's lyrics. ---> 'many of which' should be changed to 'many of whom', because critics aren't which subjects.
  • Some critics, however, were critical of the song's length and it's lyrics ---- This sentence is grammatically incorrect. "It's", which means "it is", needs to be changed to "its".
  • Following the release of The 20/20 Experience, due to strong digital downloads, it appeared on the charts in South Korea, the United Kingdom and the United States. The song debuted on the singles chart in South Korea at number 15. It additionally peaked at number 64 on the US Billboard Hot 100 chart and at number 20 on the UK R&B Chart. ----> Change it to: Following the release of The 20/20 Experience, due to strong digital downloads, it reached number 15 on the South Korean singles chart, number 64 on the US Billboard Hot 100 chart, and at number 20 on the UK R&B Chart.
  • The lead doesn't cover its live performances. I asked for this in the beginning of the review.

Composition

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Vocal style

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Critical response

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  • Nick Krewen, writing for the The Star, responded negatively to the song, stating that "Pusher Love Girl" is a "dull dirge" of a song that "plods along at a midtempo slog lasting five minutes, before a false ending and equally dull coda drag our carcasses another 400 meters after its initial impact". ---- Change to; Nick Krewen, writing for the The Star, dismissed it is a "dull dirge" of a song that "plods along at a midtempo slog lasting five minutes, before a false ending and equally dull coda drag our carcasses another 400 meters after its initial impact".
  • Robert Copsey of Digital Spy wrote that "Pusher Love Girl" and "That Girl" begin "perky enough", but that is "hard to justify" their length when they "begin to feel repetitive after the first three and self-indulgent thereafter". ---- Omit the info on "That Girl". It kinda comes out of nowhere. Change the plural wording to singular.

Live performances and covers

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  • The section only cites one cover version, so rename it to 'Live performances and cover/cover version'
  • For his performance, like the scene in The Wizard of Oz "where things suddenly burst into Technicolor, the TV screen switched to vibrant hues as a curtain went up to reveal a full orchestra" ---- Why is this relevant? Maybe if you reword, make the wording more formal, I'll see the light. Its publication/author should be present.
  • Billboard ranked Timberlake's performance of "Pusher Love Girl" and "Suit & Tie" at the cerenomy as being the best performance of the night. ---- If the performance was a medley of the two songs, you should cite that at the 'Timberlake next performed the song live at the 55th Annual Grammy Awards on February 11, for which he received a standing ovation' sentence.

Refs

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Status

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On hold.

Status, have you forgotten about the refs? Robin (talk) 22:02, 17 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Completely. I will fix them right now.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 22:31, 17 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've gotten them corrected now.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 22:39, 17 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I'll have that once-over posted by the end of the week. Kinda busy. Robin (talk) 22:54, 17 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I've concluded the review. You have seven days. Robin (talk) 19:58, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I believe everything has been corrected.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 20:19, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, all of them. Passing. Congrats Robin (talk) 21:41, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.