Talk:Protocol of Corfu/GA1

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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 12:39, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Opening comments

First task is to source those parts marked with citation needed tags. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 12:39, 18 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've fixed the various cn issues & added pages wherever needed.Alexikoua (talk) 11:56, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I feel I don't quite know enough about the subject to judge coverage on this one. What I can say is that the coverage is adequate if the Protocol is a relatively minor part of Greek/Albanian history. Is the Protocol only that? Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 14:51, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll check the relevant bibliography if some additional interesting details can be added, but in general the Protocol played a decisive role in G/A relations acoording to the treatment of the Greek community in Albania. An expantion of the 'Legacy' section may be a good option to prove that.Alexikoua (talk) 19:42, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It's done. I believe all aspects directly related to the topic are covered now.Alexikoua (talk) 21:44, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Coverage is much better. Some references need more details, if possible (#12, #22). I'm also struggling to understand the sentence As a consequence, Greek education was limited and for a time virtually eliminated (1934-1935).) (That ought to be a dash, not a hyphen, in any case.) One source says "Thus, all Greek schools were closed" which would seem to support your statement, but the other says "The Albanian Government, however, waived its insistence on the use of Albanian as the medium of instruction in Greek schools...". The two seem very different. How can those two things both be correct, and, if they require a certain nuance, might this be well placed in the article? Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 15:46, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've expanded the specific section, so a clear connection between education and the terms of the Protocol can be established by the reader.Alexikoua (talk) 22:55, 27 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

How does the The Albanian Government, however, waived its insistence on the use of Albanian as the medium of instruction in Greek schools here fit into that? Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 21:19, 28 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've fixed this part, seems I've forgot to add the last part of this paragraph (intervention of the L.o.Nations International Court in 1935).Alexikoua (talk) 20:34, 2 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm afraid I'm away for a week from tomorrow, but do work on making the prose clear:

initially unable to achieve an agreement "initially"? was this only ended by the Protocol? Did they eventually achieve another solution?
Zografos proposed three main solutions "proposed"? To whom? In what forum?
Soon however, to avoid direct confrontation this, with the above point, it's a bit unclear what the process was. Were Albania and Greece talking directly before the Commission? If not, what is this "International Commission discussions" an alternative to?
proceed to negotiations and reach an agreement do you mean "join negotiations"? They can't have "asked" him to reach an agreement; they might have hoped, but at this stage it doesn't sound like they have a particular solution in mind. They just want him to think about it.
extension of the area in which the Greek population will enjoy certain educational rights in the regions around Vlorë and Durrës – where does this region come from? also the grammar's off, you mean "would" rather than "will". What sort of rights? Are they linked to the teaching in Greek, etc. mentioned in the next section?
Christian Orthodox – do you mean Orthodox Christian? Perhaps more specifically Greek Orthodox?
Additional demands - additional to what? Merely peace?
three first classes what does this mean? what is a "first" or "second" class?
the Ottoman-era privileges were renewed we haven't had these mentioned before. Either run them in with another sentence here or as part of the background.
Great Power You mean "Great Powers", I think.
the area Northern Epirus?
provisional government which provisional government? I'm assuming a Northern Epirote one within Albania, maybe the Panepirotic Assembly of Delvino, but you haven't said.
finally ignored - "finally" doesn't sound right; you might say "finally put in place" in another context but "finally ignored" is odd. "Discarded" or "not followed" perhaps.
Tendencies - tendencies? that would mean that particular people had a "tendency". Perhaps you mean "Efforts" or something similar, although it would still be clearer to say among whom. Where these among Northern Epirote natives? At the League of Nations? In Greece?
often grounded on different positions. sounds interesting. Is there something mroe we could add? What is their argument, exactly? Is it that it didn't happen. or has been resigned to the past, or said something else?

I'll reassess then (still on hold). Thanks, Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 19:04, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I like to think I've addressed most of the issues you have raised. Let me know if there is still anything left to be done. Athenean (talk) 22:05, 8 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I made a change to clarify something that was said in the lead, but not in the article's body: that the Protocol of Corfu was defunct legally (at least internationally) with the entrance of Albania in the League of Nations in 1921. Hope no problems with that. Bolerodancer (talk) 00:33, 9 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't looked at the prose again too thorough (looks much better), but some references need tidying:

Ref #12 could do with the year added (and anything else relevant, but nothing springs to mind).

That is already given, it is 1919. Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref #13 belongs on the file description page.

Not sure I follow, could you please clarify? Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref #17 you mean "p." although this still leaves some in the the "x: y" format and some "p."

Done Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref #19 needs a lot more information, which might be helped by more standard formatting.

Done Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref #27 and #29 are the same.

Done Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref #30 needs more information. (And should be in title case.)

Not sure I follow, the authors, publisher, year, title, page number and ISBN are all included. What's missing? Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Did you lose the ref ordering with a previous edit? I notice both you and Alexikoua are editing. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 21:34, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref #35 you mean "p."; also 34 and 35 are the same work but referenced completely differently, I think (I don't know whether I've suggested a template. You don't have to use them, but some semblance of consistency is necessary to ensure understandability). Page references should use (en)dashes, not hyphens.

Don't think think this is the same ref. 35. Could you please clarify? Athenean (talk) 21:07, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Well one way or another it has been taken care of. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 21:34, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Some google books links still include "&dq" sections which mean I get the search terms you used to find them.

Should I just remove the &dq, or it and everything that comes after it? Athenean (talk) 21:08, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Colons don't have spaces before them these days and they should be removed; similarly, even if the original work incorrectly used a hyphen for date ranges in the title work these should be correct to dashes.

Believe I have removed all the columns. Athenean (talk) 21:08, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:37, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm passing the article: there are still small inconsistencies in the referencing (compare 18 and 27, for example) but these are minor and don't really impede the reader. I believe the other things have been sorted satisfactorily, although they are GA standard they are close to the boundary. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 19:27, 13 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]