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Comment: I'm not going to judge the notability, but I am concerned that there may be some WP:Close paraphrasing from the sources. Also, if possible, put a source at the end of every direct quotation and source(s) at the end of every major group of sentences. For longer quotes, consider using Template:quote or Template:quote box but only if the quotes are in the public domain (anything published in the USA prior to 1923 is in the public domain). Non-public-domain quotes should be avoided unless necessary for an understanding of the article. davidwr/(talk)/(contribs) 21:30, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: The article appears to be written in a non-neutral point of view. Phrases like "he certainly assured his status as the most prominent member of his family in the 19th century" are considered "peacock terms" and should be avoided. There are many other minor issues that can be worked out later. davidwr/(talk)/(contribs) 21:31, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: The biggest concern I have about this person is his notability. If the sources that talk about him are "local" sources, such as "history of XYZ county," that's going to be a tougher call than if they are "national" sources. Every county has locally-notable "founding fathers" but most of them would not qualify for a Wikipedia article due to lack of meeting Wikipedia's notability requirements. I am going to leave the actual evaluation on Notability to others. In the meantime, I would encourage you to read Wikipedia:Your first article, Wikipedia:Manual of style, and Wikipedia:42 before continuing. davidwr/(talk)/(contribs) 21:34, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: Reviewers note: One of the references, *At the Crossroads: Springfield, Massachusetts 1636-1975.,may refer toIf it does, the author should replace the reference with the "cite book" template in this comment. davidwr/(talk)/(contribs) 21:45, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: I'm not going to judge the notability, but I am concerned that there may be some WP:Close paraphrasing from the sources. Also, if possible, put a source at the end of every direct quotation and source(s) at the end of every major group of sentences. For longer quotes, consider using Template:quote or Template:quote box but only if the quotes are in the public domain (anything published in the USA prior to 1923 is in the public domain). Non-public-domain quotes should be avoided unless necessary for an understanding of the article. davidwr/(talk)/(contribs) 21:30, 28 March 2014 (UTC)