Talk:Pretty Please (song)/GA2

GA Review

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Nominator: Mushy Yank (talk · contribs) 16:08, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:04, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

I will follow my pledge and review this now, taking anything relevant into account from my previous review! --K. Peake 17:04, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

We may have discussed this before, but shouldn't release dates be listed for the album the song was on when it is not a single?
"from the bass-line and the title." → "from the bassline and title." with the wikilink
"promising herself she will be" → "promising she will be" since the body states she promises this both to herself and the lover
Second para looks good; nice work!

Img looks good!
"a bunch of music" I don't think this is appropriate language for Wiki like previously said; to elaborate, this does not sound encyclopaedic
The sentence about slowing down before the chorus should be merged with the tempo track one because they are too short on their own
To provide img relevancy, note that Julia Michaels also contributed backing vocal harmonies
"and gives the song" → "and gave the song"
I would recommend invoking the ref every two sentences since one invoke of the citation does not cover the entire para, especially when there is usage of quotes
"of the notes are now in reverb." shouldn't this be "were in" instead?
Like the second para, you should invoke the ref every two sentences in the third and after any sentences using direct quotations
"which himself produced," → "which he himself produced,"

Wikilink verse–chorus form
Wikilink synthesizer
[12] should be invoked after thick, also unless I'm missing something here none of the sources appear to mention any clicks on the song?
Ditto for the groove
"stress-reliving" → "stress-relieving" on the audio sample text
Pipe stabs to Stab (music)
[24][8] should be placed in numerical order
"when she sings" → "when Lipa sings"
[30] should be invoked every two sentences

Put some of The Wall Street Journal into your own words to avoid overquoting
Invoke the PopMatters ref after the first sentence too since that uses direct quotations
Pipe Vulture to Vulture (website)
"named it" → "saw the song as" to be less repetitive
Put some of Wonderland into your own words to avoid overquoting
Swap [61] with [62] for the correct order in correspondence with the countries

No concerns over copyright at all!
Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead on ref 31
Cite Universo Online as publisher on ref 48; really like the heavy amount of citations here though!
Why does ref 49 feature a set of publishers?
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 60

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; looks like you should get here in no time in the article's current state! --K. Peake 19:10, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake, hello again.

I followed the suggestions you kindly took the time to list here! Hoping I made no mess. Best, -My, oh my! (Mushy Yank) 23:20, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]