Talk:Politics of the Philippines/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:43, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think this article has been waiting at GAN for long enough! — Ghost River 17:43, 1 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

"who is both the head of state" → "who serves as both the head of state"
"president" is lowercase upon its first introduction and capitalized throughout. It's my understanding that president-as-occupation is lowercase, whereas president-as-title is capitalized, if that makes any sense
"Civil and Common law" → "civil and common law"
Delink "Spain" and "United States" per MOS:OVERLINK
In the infobox, per MOS:SEAOFBLUE, all of "constitutional republic" can be linked to just "republic", as the Constitution of the Philippines is already linked just below

Executive

"To be eligible for the presidency,"
"Vice President" should be linked at the first mention (first sentence of second paragraph) and then delinked later in the paragraph
I'm not sure how best to rephrase "aside from acting as president when the latter is unable to do so". It reads awkwardly, as the circumstances under which the VP might become acting president are illustrated later, but that sentence can't easily be moved
Link the first instance of "Cabinet" to Cabinet of the Philippines
"Cabinet includes" → "The Cabinet includes"
"The President is also given several emergency military powers," → "This title gives the President several emergency military powers" to prevent two sentences from starting "The President is also"
What is "this" in "although this automatically ends"? Is it martial law, habeas corpus, or all the powers?

Legislature

elected via the plurality-at-large voting with the country as one at-large "district". a little awkward, I think the "the" after "via" might be extraneous
"senate seats" → "Senate seats"
"every 3 years" → "every three years" per MOS:NUMERAL
"with the rest elected" → "and the rest elected"
sine die should be italicized
"Congress' decisions" → "Congress's decisions" per MOS:'S

Judiciary

arranged in along a cut either "in" or "along"
"with those on the same level ~~are~~ unable"
"where both parties are Muslims" → "where both parties are Muslim"
"although the President has influence" → "although they have influence"
Traditionally the most senior associate justice became the Chief Justice, however President Gloria Macapagal Arroyo broke with this tradition. This led to her successor, President Benigno Aquino III, taking his oath of office before an associate justice rather than the Chief Justice. Subsequently, Aquino bypassed seniority in other judicial appointments. Requires a little more explanation

Legal system

"Civil Law ... Common Law" → "civil law ... common law"
Delink "Sharia Law" (linked earlier) and make it "Sharia law"
"shall be consistent" → "must be consistent"
"and 1987, respectively."
No comma after "establishing a temporary constitution"
seen by some is there a particular faction more in support of a unicameral system than others?
It has also been argued see above
I believe "stare decisis" should be italicized as a Latin term
"Catholic church" → "Catholic Church"
Delink "President" in the bottom paragraph

Elections

which are six years Confusing syntax, subject could be interpreted as "president, vice president, and senators" rather than for terms
"up to a fifth" → "up to one-fifth"
"with the x candidates with the highest number of votes being elected." → "from which the x candidates with the highest number of votes are elected."
Lowercase "first" in "first-past-the-post"
Delink Commission on Elections and just use the acronym in the fifth paragraph; already spelled out and linked above in the first
"Both cases did not succeed" → "Neither case succeeded"

Local government

"Both actions however left" → "Both actions, however, left"
"article X" → "Article X"
Include "elections" in the link around "In 1990 elections were held"

Culture and influences

"75%" → "75 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
No comma after "often created to propel a single candidate"
Comma after "In 1992" and "In 2010"
"of the house of representatives" → "of the House of Representatives"
"Contrasted to" → "Contrasted with"
The section in parentheses would make more sense as a note than as a parenthetical sentence
No comma after "and weddings"

Catholic Church

"the church" → "the Church" throughout (lowercase is a building, uppercase is the institution)
"unifying moral framework transcends" → "unifying moral framework that transcends"
"catholic youth" → "Catholic youth" (same deal, lowercase is a synonym for "universal")
"development, not" either "which is not" or "and is not"

Military

Delink "the" in "the communist"

United States

Despite independence, unclear clause – can be inferred from context clues that it's Philippine independence, but sentence setup could also suggest US
"veterans networks" → "veterans' networks"
Hukbalahap is capitalized once and lowercase in the next sentence
backed opposition coalition building, confusing syntax
"United States ties security ties" → "United States, security ties"
"War on terror" → "War on Terror"

History

Pre-independence

Link Ferdinand Magellan and mention when he arrived
"Ilustrados" is sometimes capitalized, sometimes not
Mention the year of the Tydings-McDuffie Act
Commas around "respectively" in the sentence beginning "Quezon and Osmeña were elected"
"was inconsistent, with it sometimes being treated as a separate country and sometimes being treated as under United States jurisdiction." → "was inconsistent: sometimes it was treated as a separate country, sometimes as under US jurisdiction."

Independence

"succumbed to a heart attack in 1948" → "suffered a fatal heart attack in 1948"
"from having a Muslim majority to having a Christian majority." → "from a Muslim to a Christian majority"
to alter introduced a code ?
"The 1992 elections was the first" subject/verb agreement
"Ramos' vice president" → "Ramos's vice president" per MOS:'S
"Emassive protests" → "massive protests"
"however it did not succeed" → "which was ultimately unsuccessful"
The paragraph beginning "Arroyo" uses her name six or seven times; can this para be reworded to reduce that?
Delink "massive" in the phrase "massive War on Drugs"
Move the last photo up a paragraph to avoid MOS:SANDWICH issues

References

Good

General comments

Images are properly licensed and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score looks good

Thank you for bearing with me! Putting this on hold now; as always, feel free to ping me with questions or comments, and let me know when you're finished! — Ghost River 21:20, 6 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@GhostRiver: I must apologise that you have caught me at a very busy period. Would it be possible to extend this beyond a week so I can try and find some time to get to it? CMD (talk) 16:01, 11 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Chipmunkdavis I can leave this open indefinitely as long as you're in communication with me. — Ghost River 16:06, 11 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I can certainly maintain communication as needed. CMD (talk) 16:26, 11 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Notes:

Still have to figure out capitalization of President etc.
In Judiciary I simplified rather than expanded. There's a bit more detail on the main article, but it seemed undue to go into the detail here.
For your questions in Legal system, I don't know of any particular names for factions. Many ideas have risen and fallen at different times due to different people.

CMD (talk) 07:49, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@GhostRiver: I think I've dealt with all of the above! Sorry it took so long. CMD (talk) 05:58, 20 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Chipmunkdavis Now it appears to be my time to apologize for lateness! Everything looks good – happy to pass! — Ghost River 17:24, 22 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]