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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:13, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Will do soon JAGUAR  13:13, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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  • The lead needs to be expanded slightly to meet WP:LEADLENGTH. I would just recommending adding a bit on its reception
  • "The termination date of service for Final Fantasy XI and Playonline" - PlayOnline
  • "Square announced three Final Fantasy games," - needs italicisation
  • "The service was first announced as costing 500 yen" - ¥500
  • "and a 1000 yen monthly user fee" - ¥1000
  • "PlayOnline opened on June 6, 2000 to both Japanese and English speaking players" - speaking players? How about just something like Japan and English-speaking countries or even Japan and Anglophone countries
  • "The sites merchandise included pieces from" - site's
  • "The browser was not a general purpose Internet tool, but only accessed Square content" - delink Square as it already has been linked
  • "exclusively despite Microsofts initial wishes" - Microsoft's
  • " for this reason. it was hoped that content would" - capital 'It'
  • "retailing at 7,140 Yen and had a monthly subscription price of 1,344 Yen" - use the Yen symbols ¥7140 and ¥1344
  • "and a sought 5 million dollar settlement" - $5 million
  • No dead links
  • No dab links

Pretty cool to think that an online service for the PS2 shut down last month! On hold until all are addressed. JAGUAR  13:22, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Much better! Thanks for the speedy fixes. Promoted. JAGUAR  14:10, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]