Talk:Platt-LePage XR-1/GA1
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Reviewer: —Ed!(talk) 02:49, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written:
- Comments
- "Platt-LePage's submission was judged superior to its competitors" - which of the competitors' models was the XR-1 superior to? And how was it superior? Add a little clarity or links, if possible.
- Done - added a footnote detailing the other submissions; I can't come across exactly how the Army judged the XR-1 superior, just that it did. - The Bushranger One ping only 21:11, 28 December 2010 (UTC)
- "the aircraft was not completed until three months later than the contract schedule" - any idea why this was the case?
- Done - Can't find anything about exactly why there were delays, but I did find that the delays spurred Sikorsky receiving an Army contract, so I've added that. - The Bushranger One ping only 21:44, 28 December 2010 (UTC)
- "With the worst of the bugs believed to be worked out," - calling them 'bugs' seems a little unencyclopedic.
- "improved helicopters, such as Sikorsky's XR-4, were becoming available" - how was the XR-4 improved over the XR-1?
- Financial figures would be good too, ie cost of the contract or renegotiations, cost of the models, projected production cost etc.
- Done There's contradictorary information in the sources - the Smithsonian says the intial contract was "nearly $500,000", while Francillon's book gives a number just under $200,000 and notes that contract change orders increased the amount. It seems like the Smithsonian number is the final amount (and is likely more accurate), so I've used that. - The Bushranger One ping only 21:35, 28 December 2010 (UTC)
- It is factually accurate and verifiable:
- Pass Has plenty of refs.
- It is broad in its coverage:
- Pass Seems to cover the subject well.
- It follows the neutral point of view policy:
- Pass
- It is stable:
- Pass
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate:
- Pass Four images.
- Overall:
- On Hold pending changes. It could stand a copy edit but other than that it meets the GA requirements as I see them. —Ed!(talk) 03:48, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks. I'll get to this soon as I can, my internet access is a bit spotty at the moment. - The Bushranger One ping only 06:08, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay, been busy and had connection problems. Will get to this ASAP. - The Bushranger One ping only 22:01, 24 December 2010 (UTC)
- Very good. I am now passing the article. Well done! —Ed!(talk) 02:43, 4 January 2011 (UTC)