Hello, Some Dude From North Carolina. I will be the one to review this nomination, which I will present shortly. Hopefully, my feedback will be helpful. Tayi ArajakateTalk06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Question about the image caption. It's been a long time since I saw the episode but is the caption accurate? As far as I remember, the trailer implied that he was preparing to confront the police but wasn't he simply preparing his gun to shoot himself? Tayi ArajakateTalk06:59, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@Tayi Arajakate: Well, in the episode, Walter White points his gun towards the sounds of the sirens, questions this decision and attempts to commit suicide, and then points the gun again towards the sirens. I would say that per the timeline of the events, the caption is accurate. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Suggestions:
The sentence "Jesse drives back to show his distributor, Krazy-8 but encounters Krazy-8's cousin, Emilio Koyama, who believes Jesse set him up during the drug bust." is a bit awkward. I would suggest either removing "show" or adding "to show the product to his distributor".
The sentence "However, The Hollywood Reporter revealed that same year that the pilot had in fact been watched by 1.41 million people instead." is a bit awkward as well. For instance the phrase "that same year that the pilot", it should also clarify that it was later in the same year.
The quotations could be turned down a bit, for instance at the beginning of the section on production. Some of them could be re-worked as sentences narrating what Gilligan says instead of direct quotes.