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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 13:08, 4 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:08, 4 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • Lead and infobox;
    • After being accidentally wounded, gassed and promoted to the rank of lance corporal, he was awarded the Military Medal in January 1918 for bravery in the field.; This entire sentence reads vague, it is something this he was promoted and awarded the medal for being wounded and gassed. Please rephrase
    • he single-handedly killed an eight-man German machine gun crew -> he killed an eight-man German machine gun crew alone; or something similar, I feel that "single-handedly killed" doesn't comply with the NPOV
    • Please consider splitting the lead into two for improving the flow and readability
  • Section 1; all good
  • Section 2;
    • 4:30 am; please add {{nbsp}} per MOS:TIME
    • in October he was gassed; gassed where? during which battle?
  • Section 3; all good
  • 65% confidence, violation possible. But I understand that this is due to the citation quote of the medal.
Very well written. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 10:23, 16 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks Krishna. I believe I have addressed all your comments. The earwig result is from the quotes. See what you think? Regards, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:43, 16 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:09, 23 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]