Talk:Peter Pan (American horse)
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Introduction
[edit]I have just rewritten the intro. There are probably a number of other such articles that need a similar rewrite.
Peter Pan (1904-1933) was an American Hall of Fame Thoroughbred racehorse whose sire and grandsire were also Hall of Fame inductees, as was his daughter Top Flight.
This is not good. Peter Pan was not a "Hall of Fame" Thoroughbred. (There was no Hall of Fame, when he was racing.)
He was a champion race horse and sire, bred by a breeder. He won yea and yea race (which is why he deserves a Wiki article and a place in the Hall of Fame).
The fact that his sire and grandsire were also inducted into the Hall of Fame has to do with their fame, not Peter Pan's. ie. it really doesn't belong on the first paragraph. Peter Pan's fame lies in the races that he won, and the success of his descendant (he is a famous sire, as well as a famous racehorse.) And yes, his later honour needs a mention in the intro.
Can you please check and make sure that I have put the most essential wins into that intro, and jiggle them around if I have left out anything of major significance?
Note that I have made a separate section on the later honour, because it was so very much later, and have placed the mention of his famous antecedent in that paragraph.