Talk:Pete Conrad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CycloneIsaac (talk · contribs) 00:51, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing later.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 00:51, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

92% for the copyvio detector, but seemed like the site copied from Wikipedia.
The lead should mention a bit about his post-NASA career.
- Expanded a significant amount Kees08 (Talk)
"From the beginning, Pete Conrad was clearly a bright, intelligent boy, but he continually struggled with his schoolwork." Borderline MOS:PUFF?
- Reworded a little, do not think I can get rid of the words specifically without taking away the meaning of the sentence (that he was considered smart but did poorly in school). Kees08 (Talk)
Link center in the article.
- Done Kees08 (Talk)
"He excelled in Navy flight school, and he served for several years as an aircraft carrier-based fighter pilot in the Navy. Conrad also served as a flight instructor in Navy flight schools along the Gulf of Mexico." ^{[citation needed]}
- Cited Kees08 (Talk)
Two links for Gordon Cooper in one section is a bit much.
- Done Kees08 (Talk)
"Both Pete and Jane remarried." and "Conrad met Nancy Crane, a Denver divorcee, through mutual friends. Conrad and Crane married in 1990." should be merged.
- Any more info on Jane's remarriage?
Reference 2 could be expanded to add ISBN, date published, etc.
- Done Kees08 (Talk)
Reference 6 needs to be in the same format as others.
- Sorry, I do not understand? Kees08 (Talk)
- Okay, done. Kees08 (Talk)
  - The reference isn't using a citation template unlike the others. You should change it for consistency.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 06:28, 26 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 28 needs an access-date.
- Done Kees08 (Talk)
Are there more sources that could back up References 29-32? Citing IMDb on its own is not reliable.
- Hm, in this instance they fall under 'disputed uses' (though I do not see any links to discussions and if it will always be disputed..). I can make an effort to find other sources, if you want. Kees08 (Talk)
Have you considered putting pictures in a image gallery? The photos in the NASA career section are stacking quite a bit.
- Spread them around a bit. Kees08 (Talk)

Should be it for now.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:50, 23 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]