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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  • Intro: Are you following a particular method for linking things here? For instance First World War is linked but not Second World War, and I would've thought Australian Imperial Force would be worth a link there as well. No doubt there are others but those are the ones that stick out.
  • First World War:
    • During this time, Statton was promoted to temporary sergeant on 16 January 1917. "During this time" is redundant given we have a precise date.
    • The paragraph beginning The 40th Battalion began their attack at approximately 07:30... uses both "their" as a possessive for the battalion (see first sentence, among others) and "its" (The battalion was later able to reach its objectives). I believe grammatically "its" is correct, seeing as it's one battalion, even though it contains many people. If you refer to the "members of the battalion", then obviously "their" is correct. At any rate, it needs to be consistent. Pls check rest of the article for this as well.
    • By 20:00, both battalion's.... Plural "battalions", not possessive "battalion's".
    • ...the name of Sergeant Percy Statton would appear in the London Gazette announcing to the world that he had been awarded the Victoria Cross. Reckon "to the world" is a bit OTT and can be safely deleted...
    • ...before he was granted a month leave. Should be "a month's leave" I think.
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  • I can imagine the answer but is no significant info regarding his service in World War II? If nothing else, I think we could at least use the WWII Nominal Roll and say he was in the 5th Battalion Volunteer Defence Corps at his discharge.
    • No book source or the ADB even mentions he served in the Second World War; quite ridiculous really. I couldn't dig much out of his service file at the NA, but the little I could I did add in. ie. Statton's commission. Have added in the 5th Battalion. Abraham, B.S. (talk) 08:10, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
  • Overall:
    a Pass/Fail:

Overall, very good, but placing on hold for the moment. Pls respond to the above in the next 7 days so the article can be passed.

Thanks for the review, mate. I think I've addressed all the issues raised, and have replied in the appropiate sections above and below. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 08:10, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Other comments not affecting GA review:

  • Intro: This is a general, if minor, thing for all the VC articles that I only picked up on while expanding Frank Hubert McNamara, and which I'll be altering there, namely word repetition in the opening line: ...was an Australian recipient of the Victoria Cross, the highest award for gallantry "in the face of the enemy" that can be awarded to members of the British and Commonwealth armed forces. I'm changed the first "award" to "decoration" in McNamara's article to avoid this repetition, although there are plenty of other combinations that could be used.
  • First World War : I guessing there's only the two pics you've used that are available, since one in this section would help.
  • Later life:
    • True to her word that she would leave him if he went off to war, Statton and his wife divorced on 1 October 1920. Because of the focus on his wife at the start of the sentence, I think "Statton's wife divorced him on..." is better phrasing.
    • In 1956, Statton joined the Australian contingent of Victoria Cross recipients who attended the parade in London's Hyde Park to commemorate the centenary of the institution of the Victoria Cross. Suggest the second mention of "Victoria Cross" should be abbreviated to "the VC" or "the award", to avoid repetition.

Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:30, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, looks good - passed and well done! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:10, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]