Talk:Pawnee Zoo/GA1
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Reviewer: JulieSpaulding (talk) 09:25, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
Hi Hunter, I'll be reviewing this article. I'll be going through the problems I spot semi-haphazardly, so bear with me...
- You might like to reference the plot section. If you don't want to cite the Pawnee Zoo episode itself, at least cite a show recap.
- In the first paragraph of the section 'Production', a weasel word appears in the phrase 'Commentators suggested...' and in the sentence before that also. Exactly who suggested that?
- Actually, there's no reason to use that wording in this case anyway. I simply dropped the weasel words and changed it to say that the penguin marriage mirrored the real life one. — Hunter Kahn 01:08, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
- The word 'said' is used 20 times in the Reception section. I would probably vary my statements like this:
- Critic A commented that Poehler's character appeared too cheery, but Critic B viewed this as a mere statement of her individuality.
- I dropped some of the "said"s. — Hunter Kahn 01:08, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
- Critic A commented that Poehler's character appeared too cheery, but Critic B viewed this as a mere statement of her individuality.
- Is the use of the word 'literally' in the last sentence of the 'Plot' section necessary?
- Dropped it. — Hunter Kahn 01:08, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
I know it's nit-picky, but I'm willing to pass this article right away as soon as these issues are fixed. JulieSpaulding (talk) 10:05, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail: