Talk:Paul and Virginia (film)/GA1

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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 16:03, 23 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Going to take a look at this soon. good888 (talk) 16:03, 23 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Review is now complete. good888 (talk) 11:13, 28 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead section

Should nobleman be linked? I am not too sure.

I'd rather not, it is not a title or obscure. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The ship returns home in a hurricane and she drowns, Paul nearly dies in a vain attempt to save her." Perhaps you could rewrite to: "The ship returns home in a hurricane and she drowns, with Paul nearly dying in an vain attempt to save her."

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The film is presumed lost." Try and add this somewhere in the body of this article.

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

What does "rude cottages" mean nowadays? Can it be linked?

This comes from the official release and it is like roughly built or crude - it is not elegant. The only thing worth linking would be a dictionary definition of rude. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Production

"Cameramen employed by the company during this era included Blair Smith, Carl Louis Gregory, and Alfred H. Moses, Jr. though none are specifically credited. The role of the cameraman was uncredited in 1910 productions." Perhaps you could rewrite to: "Cameramen employed by the company during this era included Blair Smith, Carl Louis Gregory, and Alfred H. Moses, Jr. though none are specifically credited as the role of the cameraman was uncredited in 1910 productions."

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"by unnecessary taking a jab at a film to bolster another Licensed company." Why is licensed capitalized? Also "by unnecessary taking a jab" doesn't sound right. I am pretty sure unnecessary can be rewritten.

Fixed. Licensed because it is part of the Edison Trust... but this is more complex and doesn't have a proper link at this time. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Release and reception

You already linked Paul et Virginie.

Fixed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Walton of The Moving Picture News, praised the film as a success, but did not provide any details as to why it was successful." Who is Walton?

He was a reviewer, but I don't have his full name or any more information. Walton, however, was a prolific reviewer. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

References

Is it possible that The Daily Republican, The Frederick Post and Oshkosh Daily Northwestern be linked?

Done. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

None of the links are broken. However, refs 3, 5 and 6 appear to be the same reference.

Thank you. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Going to place on hold for now. good888 (talk) 11:13, 28 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@ChrisGualtieri: Hey erm, could you please respond to my suggestions here. Thanks. Good888 (talk) 16:06, 8 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll probably get to this tomorrow. Sorry, I've been very busy and haven't had much time to pop on and check things. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 04:25, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay, @Good888:, all set now I think. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:11, 11 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lovely. Promoting to GA class. Good888 (talk) 09:16, 12 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]