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The lead is the section that needs the most improvement. In general, it should be expanded (to at least double the length).
A good lead should show the progression of a player's career (i.e. the highlights of his season-to-season accomplishments), while integrating his career achievements (e.g. being in the 3000 hit club, number of batting titles). Babe Ruth is a good example of a lead that does both.
Some things I would recommend adding are
He played most of his career with the Pirates
He played in and lost the 1927 World Series
All-star appearances
10th all-time in triples
That his number was retired, and when
He had a brother, plus the "most hits" accomplishments or "second brother pair in HOF (if it's still a small number in total today)", or both
At the end (if it was really that well known): his reputation for only being able to hit with whiskey
It's up to you what you want to add, and how you want to organize it.
After the first mention of Major League Baseball, write "(MLB)" next to it
I believe I've expanded it enough. Mentioned: Triples, Doubles, team records, 3 batting titles, 8 seasons with 200+ hits, him and younger brother lloyd in hall of fame, and postseason appearance loss to Yankees.Hamma085 (talk) 17:38, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
His brother Lloyd Waner ===>>> His younger brother Lloyd Waner - Done
He was born with the middle name of John but his middle name was changed from John to Glee after an uncle of the same name gave him a shotgun at the age of 6. Waner stated ===>>> Waner was born with the middle name of John but his middle name was changed from John to Glee after an uncle named Glee gave him a shotgun at the age of 6. He stated (unclear otherwise, in the first sentence) - Done
with the larger apparent size of the baseball he was able to hit the center more often. <<<=== Make this a separate sentence. - Done
In general, point out how the Pirates did in key years. I would point out years where they finished second, along with how many games back from first, and who won the division that year. I would also point out the few years where they had a losing record and that they only finished with a losing record three times with Waner on the team. - Added information for some losing seasons and referenced the three losing seasons in 15 years as well as finishing in the top 3 seven times while he was on the team.
1927 was a standout year ===>>> The 1927 season was a standout year (don't start a sentence with a number) - Done
, he collected at least 200 hits ===>>> He also collected at least 200 hits (separate sentence) - Done
a .368 batting average with 117 runs ===>>> a .368 batting average and 117 runs - Done
In 1933, Major League Baseball hosted the inaugural MLB All-Star Game ===>>> The 1933 season was also the first year that Major League Baseball hosted the inaugural MLB All-Star Game - Done
he hit .362 and led the league in hits (217) ===>>> hitting .362 and leading the league in hits (217) - Done
1937 was the eighth time ===>>> The 1937 season was the eighth time - Done
with a .258 average, 39 RBIs, 86 hits ===>>> recording a .258 average, 39 RBIs, and 86 hits - Done
playing 92 total games (83 with the Dodgers and nine with the Yankees after being released by the former on September 1). He batted .280, 17 RBIs, and 40 hits. ===>>> He played 92 total games, 83 with the Dodgers and nine with the Yankees after being released by the former on September 1, batting .280 with 17 RBIs and 40 hits. - Done
making one plate appearance as a pinch hitter and getting walked in his one appearance ===>>> making one plate appearance as a pinch hitter in which he drew a walk. - DoneHamma085 (talk) 16:38, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
PAUL WANER BECOMES SEVENTH MEMBER OF THE 3,000-HIT CLUB" <<<=== Make this not ALL CAPS - Done
Do you have the McMane, Fred page number(s)? - Added, it was page 126-128
No dab links.
All of the links work.
No plagiarism concerns.
The prose is pretty good. In the main part of the article, the main thing I suggested is to add the Pirates' performance when relevant. The lead needs the most work. It should be longer, and repeat the highlights from the main part of the article. I think this is your first good article nomination, so let me know if you have any questions. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:31, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
