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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 15:54, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Happy to offer a review. I've not seen the film, but hopefully that won't stand in the way! Josh Milburn (talk) 15:54, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Not the biggest problem, but I feel that the lead could be beefed out a little. Maybe you could merge the first two paragraphs and expand what is currently the third?
  • The links in footnotes 9 and 31 are broken.
  • Is it the whole of Pimlico which becomes part of the House of Bergundy (plot) or a "small part" of it (lead)?
  • We have some great free images of some of the cast members; if I were you, I'd take advantage of that fact and drop a few around the article.
  • Perhaps a mention of the character of the professor could be added to the plot, given that she is mentioned in another section.
  • Personally, I'd move the themes section to before the reception section and bundle release in with production. (I also like production before the plot section, but I think I'm in the minority there.)
  • Perhaps you could note the eventual winner of the BAFTA and the Oscar? Also, those nominations definitely belong in the lead!
  • "recover the spirit, the resilience and local autonomy and unity, of wartime London" Is that quote accurate? The sentence structure is a little atypical!
  • "the welcome return to the ration books at the end of the film" Again, it'd be great if this could be added to the plot section.
    • Added to the last line
  • Is Pemberton the main character? I assume so; this could be made a little clearer. Perhaps a mention in the lead?
    • I've sort of relied on convention with the name listed first in a few places, although we already point out in the lead that Holloway was "starring", rahter than just appearing. I've added 'lead' to the casting section to make sure it's clear. - The Bounder (talk) 09:00, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • On the same topic, I'd definitely like to see a mention of the radio adaptations in the lead.
  • Could I recommend {{reflist|30em}} rather than {{reflist}}, given your short footnotes?
  • Category:Films set in London may be a good addition.
  • I'm seeing quite a lot of hits on Google Scholar; it looks like this film has received a good bit of academic attention. Some of these may have something to offer to the article; for example, Tony Williams's "The Repressed Fantastic in Passport to Pimlico" (apparently published in a few places) and Chantal Cornut-Gentille D'Arcy's "Classic Comedy as a Barometer for Present Times or the Debunking of Categorical Delineations of Nationality in "Passport to Pimlico" (Henry Cornelius, 1949)" might be worth putting in a further reading section, if nothing else.
  • Sources are all appropriate, images look fine.
  • I've done some copyediting; please do check that you're happy with my edits.

If you're interested in aiming towards featured article status, I'd be happy to offer some suggestions, but I think that might require some (more!) work sifting through libraries and archives. However, that's certainly not necessary: I really enjoyed this article, and don't think it is at all far from being ready to promote to GA status. Is this your first nomination at GAC? If so, it's very polished! Josh Milburn (talk) 18:02, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Many thanks for your edits and your comments, which I hope I have dealt with fully. I'm not sure about FA - that seems a fairly big mountain to climb, but maybe in a couple of months when I feel a bit more comfortable with what I'm doing, I'll start doing some more research on it. Thanks again for your work on this! - The Bounder (talk) 09:00, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    • Great, I'm happy that these fixes deal with the issues I raised, and another glance through the article suggests that this is definitely worth promoting to GA status. A pleasure to (briefly) work with you; feel free to message me if you have any other articles going through GAC, FAC or PR if you're looking for a reviewer (but no promises). Josh Milburn (talk) 23:02, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]