Talk:Parshvanatha/GA2
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 14:47, 14 October 2019 (UTC)
Opening statement
[edit]In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 14:47, 14 October 2019 (UTC)
- @Capankajsmilyo: Hello? You there? I started reviewing this article 11 days ago, and I'm wondering if you missed the automated bot message informing you. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 11:46, 25 October 2019 (UTC)
- Hi @Vami IV:. I did miss the bot message. Thanks for starting the GA review. Will fix all your points soon. Capankajsmilyo(Talk | Infobox assistance) 18:07, 25 October 2019 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- There should be a link to Dharma in Jainism in the text
(ford-makers or propagators of dharma)
He was the earliest exponent of Karma philosophy in the recorded history.
Which recorded history?[...] whereas historians point that he [...]
Point out?Digambaras disagree with Śvētāmbara interpretations.
Redundant, remove.
Style
[edit]- There are instances of both "BC" and "BCE".
Jain biography
[edit]There are terms and pieces of information in this section that, as a Westerner with little grasp on Indian religion, escape me with just the article alone. Ideally, the article prose would introduce or explain these; examples of this would be the tirthankaras, which are explained, but in parentheses (replace these with a comma; it is best to use parentheses sparingly and for notes like these, which provide small details). Others, like what Indras are, are not explained.
Colossal statues
[edit]Expand this section. There are six sentences - one without citation - in this section, none of which detail why or how Jains build these statues, or trace their creation through history.
- Hi Capankajsmilyo, Citation is added for the sentence with missing citation. Pratyk321
GA progress
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Status query
[edit]Vami IV, Capankajsmilyo, it has been over a month since anything was posted to this page or to the article. Where does this nomination stand, and will there be any progress soon? Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:38, 19 December 2019 (UTC)