Talk:Parkinson's disease/GA3

GA Review

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Nominator: HAL333 (talk · contribs) 18:01, 23 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: IntentionallyDense (talk · contribs) 01:52, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This is a huge topic so it may take me longer than usual to review, I'll fill out the table as I go and make comments below so it is easier for you to respond. At first glance, there is a few SFN errors that should be fixed. Additionally per WP:MEDDATE we should be using articles published within the last 5 years wherever possible. Because Parkinsons is such a hot topic I would imagine there is enough research to be able to do this. If you plan on taking this to FAC then I'd try to use the 5 year rule, but for the sake of GAN I try to stick to 10 years. Meaning every source published before 2015 (excluding NICE reviews, Cocheran reviews, and history section) should be replaced with more recent sources. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 01:52, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Some minor issues are listed below. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	7. Overall assessment.

Images

For the image under the motor section of symptoms "diminutive handwriting" isn't defined which is an issue cause the wikilink doesn't really help. A quick explanation would be nice. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Under the autonomic section, I don't feel like your image caption of Dysphagia—an autonomic failure—and subsequent complications like aspiration pneumonia (pictured) reduce quality of life. is super helpful here. Could it be changed to something along the lines of Dysphagia can lead to aspiration pneumonia (pictured) as the QOL isn't brought up elsewhere in this section so it feels out of place. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The caption under the two images in the causes section may read better as The protein alpha-synuclein aggregates into Lewy bodies and neurites. Structural model of alpha-synuclein (left), photomicrograph of Lewy bodies (right). to better explain the two images. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Under imaging the term "F-DOPA" is used but never explained. Is there a wikilink you could add or could you give a brief explanation on this? IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Under levodopa the acronym LCE is used. Could you spell this out in full? IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The wording of the caption under the tricycle is a little odd. Could you reword it? IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Under cell based therapies the caption says "one such iSPC differentiated" but I assume you mean iPSCs. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 02:24, 26 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]