Talk:Paralympic Games/GA1

GA Review

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Firstly thank you for all your work on the article, the attention you gave it was long overdue. I'll take some time to read over the article and make any simple changes before I post my comments here. Reviewer: Basement12 (T.C) 08:52, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The main thought I have on my first read through is that as this is the main Paralympic Games article, and therefore an equivalent to the Olympic Games article, the whole Classification section is far too detailed to belong here. I think it should be moved to the separate Summer and Winter (or Paralympic sports) articles or placed in a new article Paralympic classifications with a summary remaining here. I'd like to hear your thoughts on this.

I will pull the classifications in the Summer and Winter Games articles and do a summary of what the classifications are for in this article. Regarding equivalency with the Olympic Games article I feel the same way but I'm wondering if you feel as though the article isn't comprehensive enough? I tried to add more information as I thought of it so if there is more that I should add (content-wise) please let me know.

Believe it or not but the Winter Paralympic Games reverts back to the Paralympic Games article. There is no separate article for the Winter Paralympics! Wow, I did not know that. I'll see if I can create one. I'm shaking my head on this one. How could we miss that? H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 16:17, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I've expanded the description of the classifications and removed the Summer Paralympics classification descriptions. I am going to create a Winter Paralympics article though it currently redirects to the Paralympics article so I'm going to try and figure out how to create one in this situation (which I have never encountered).

I've now started a Winter Paralympics page and removed the classification descriptions from this article and put them in that article. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 23:55, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The statement in the lead that the Games take place every four years after the Olympics is incorrect and needs rewording to take into account Summer and Winter varieties.

I reworded this a bit, let me know if it addresses your concerns. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 21:13, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reference #3 seems to be formatted differently to all the others

I fixed this ref with a cite web template.

Images all look fine fair use-wise but is File:Paralympics headquarters by David Shankbone.jpg really worth using, its just the exterior of a very dull building. ~~I also believe the caption on File:Jody Cundy.jpg is incorrect, it says it is from the 2008 Games but the signs on track clearly say Manchester.~~ Following it back to its initial posting on Flikr shows that it is from British National Track Championships 2007, i've changed the caption to reflect this.

I totally agree, it was an image that was there prior to my work on the article and as I look at it, there just doesn't seem to be a reason to have it.

I removed the image of the building and added a couple of images (one of Craven and another of a stamp from the 1972 Paralympics, I thought it was interesting).

No mention of Philip Craven, head of the IPC?

Good catch, I'll add some info or at least a mention of him.

I added a couple of sentences on him in the "Current" section.

Capitalisation of Summer and Winter is inconsistent, i'm sure you have a favoured system for when/if they should be.

Another good catch, I like to capitalize as I feel as though it is a proper noun but you're right it isn't consistent.

Done. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 20:57, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It may be an idea to combine the two host city tables, as was done in Olympic Games, this isn't something i'll insist on for GA status though.

The lists of sports could be better combined into a summary with a single link to the main Paralympic sports article.

For the above two items; I combined the host city tables into one table per the Olympic Games article and then removed the lists of sports. Instead and have a short paragraph summarizing the information about the Paralympic sports and then there is a main article link to the Paralympic sports article. I hope that jives with what you're thinking. The results are Paralympics host city and Paralympics sports sections, rather than separate Winter/Summer Paralympic host and sports sections. I think it's better organized the way it is now, it's more intuitive and easier to follow. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 22:36, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review I'll get to work on these items today. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 16:12, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've started work on your review, I'm consumed with RL today and part of tomorrow but I am working on it so if you can give me a couple of days I should be able to address all of your concerns. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 17:07, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I still have to work on a Winter Paralympics article so that I can move the description of the Winter Paralympics classifications into this new article. Other than that I think I'm done with your suggestions. H1nkles (talk) _{citius altius fortius} 22:36, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've removed some info from the classifications section, I can see what you were trying to do with talk of weight divisions but it was a bit off topic I think. Other than that it all looks good - Basement12 (T.C) 09:16, 15 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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